by dreamsr4ever
i enjoyed watching my husband fuck my mom. cumming twice, once in the pussy and once in the ass. watching him lust over my mom really turns me on. afterwards, watching the satisfied smile on her face is pleasingly rewarding.
It's a hot idea and the some of the description is a turn on but it is all on one tone. Try putting some dialogue in to spice it up.
This is written very poorly. You need to work on your Grammar and sentence structure. It is just not erotic with the way it is so badly written. Don’t quit writing just sit down and read out loud what you have here and you will see it is not very good.