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ARRRRGGGHHH
Another excellent chapter. What a way to end the chapter.
Find a hobby
PLEASE find another hobby because your idea of a novel\story is badly warped. Your characters have about as much personality as Ken and Barbi. Whoever taught you English composition should refund your school fees because while you may have been present in class, your brain was cearly absent
Convict's revenge
Is this the revenge of the convicts from Oz to flood our story sites with junk like this? Leave this side of the big pond alone, the English are on the other side. What were you sentenced for anyway - was it for boring your lord and master to death?
he got the song wrong
he got the song wrong, Muß i' denn is the wooden hart song, not wooden emotions or did he use Pinnochio to model his leading lady & man on.
B B & B
BAD, BORING AND BEST DELETED
Oh no!
And to top it all off, you have discovered, or at least sunk to using..... cliffhangers!!! John b.
clifhanger
This wannabe novel & author should be dropped off a clif, never mind the clifhanger
no zero this time.....
have to give it 25. it was so bad that it makes me laugh... "peter was to busy drowning in the depths of her eyes" :-) every time i think it cannot get worse but you always surprise me!
I like it
I find the characters a little over the top sometimes, but I think you have a good storyline. Just keep going! I'm going to be honest...I want to know what the surprise is!
A I
Anybody else get the feeling that this is a AI experiment?
Maybe the students at MITI scanned in a lot of Mills & Boone novels and programmed one of the old redundant computers to write a story. Then along came a power surge that corrupted the OS and here we have the end result.I mean really, this is far too stupid to have been written by human
What is all the fuss about ?
We know the author can't write a damm and all the submissions are boring crap, so why does anybody bother to read it when you know it will not improve and stay at the same boring level? You've read the chapter and voted, so why read anymore? Geez
Change the title
Should be called endless because it just goes on and on without really going anywhere. Do authors here get paid by the chapter ?
wrap it up
this could have been wrapped up in two chapters at most or do you have aspirations of becoming the next hemingway? If so, it is inthe wrong place, wrong story, wrong plot in short it is all wrong
Worst writer awards
Sofar it is a tie between Samual X and JAScooter
Amazing
All I ever read is negative comments from the readers. What is amazing is that they continue to come back to it again and again. Why is this story so unbelievable? Can a person believe that a woman could love her husband from the bottom of her heart and yet screw a dozenother guys without expecting it to damage the relationship? I guess we like stroke stories that are completely unbelievable but a novel type story we tear apart. Let the author write his story and cut the crap of tearing him apart!
the reason for the negative comments
if the author wants to write a multi chapter epic as a first attempt then his skills should be up to scratch otherwise he will be getting a lot of flack. Some of the comments had merit especially those about getting an editor.
Is there a way to check the voting results here? That will give a more accurate reader response because on average readers don't bother writing comments, some might vote and some won't
Ratings
Novels in general have higher ratings and fewer votes than Romance or especially Loving Wives stories. The present chapter has by far the lowest rating of any in the series (3.82). One of the earlier chapters is up with a 4.75 rating(max possible is 5.00)!
The last three previous chapters have ratings of 4.32, 4.20
and 4.34 respectivamente at the moment. Interesting to note
is that 8 of the first 10 chapters have ratings above 4.50!
I am sure that in the Romance category these ratings would
drop on the average 0.7 points! But in fact I have seen much worse plotting in many other stories. The funny part, of course, is that the people rejecting the author continue
reading the chapters.
I'M STILL WITH YOU
We want to see what happens, so keep going...
Undeserved Criticism
I see you are still getting bashed! All a reader has to do to avoid you is to not open the story. If bashing you is so all important then slide down to the end and do your thing! HOWEVER let us see what you have worked on polished and written that compares! Or are the only things you write are insults and condemnation? It takes little courage to hurt others annoumusly, even a kindergarten "Bullly" can do that..............Richard
What's the deal?
What is it about this story and this author that is provoking such abusive comments? Constructive criticism is one thing; author bashing something different entirely. Yes, perhaps at some point the author might like to revisit this work and tighten up a few things. But it is no where near as bad as some of the other pieces I've seen on this website. And face it, folks, no one is forcing you to read it. If you find it so awful, stop reading!
Susan
Basher hypocrisy
Back again for my daily dose of entertainment with this story, but more so for the comments at the end. These are amusing and often instructive, but many are also disgusting, a very bad advertisement for their anonymous writers, the bashers. Bashers often leave comments loaded with spelling mistakes and grammatical errors, yet they call for the writer to get help and learn the trade. Maybe a good many of these people are enjoying the attack for its own sake, protected by anonymity as they are. Their xenophobic, agist comments are a form of abuse that would not be tolerated anywhere else. It's hypocrisy to complain about an author's personality and writing skills, then write shit by way of comment. The author's grammar seems ok, so what's the problem? He's written his piece like they all do here. There are far worse stories on this site and there are also better ones. Bashers should read the better ones instead. Or write one of their own. Most writers take notice of serious criticism containing useful advice. Angie
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