All Comments on 'rising to risa'

and it works like the orchestration of the toreador on the heated crowd.

but "you had me at hello" as they said in the movie. In other words I think you need to do some heavy trimming, it's simply overmodified.

"in nightfire light of neardark bright tree vaulted skies"

------------tree-vaulted skies is stunning, but "neardark bright" weakens the image and though I see the wordplay with light, I still think the image is the poem here.

"I am drawn to ring in sketchy curascuro limelight lines"

------------ curascuro lines is wonderful, but again the rest of the modifiers are distracting.

You have a powerful poem with some overwhelming imagery in here, you just have to carve it out.

Nicely done,

Jim : )

This stands in stark contrast to the other piece posted on the 7th, "dance for the evening", which was a much easier read. I concur with Jim's thoughts here that you've got a bit much going here and with some trimming this could be as easy a read as "dance...".