Leader of the Pack Ch. 01

um, ridiculous name??

I have no idea why anyone would think Aishlinn is a ridiculous name. Maybe it's because I'm Irish and that name isn't uncommon over here but I wouldn't say it's particularly ridiculous anywhere.

Great story

Great story so far. I really like the emotional undertones of this one for some reason..... Both the mains have their foibles and flaws, makes the story so much easier to read when they both seem more gritty and neither is perfect. Nothing wrong with the name, either. Most names here in America are Anglicized versions of an original. Miguel, Mikael, and lots of other names became Michael. The name that was used in this story is Irish in origin, and fits well with the theme of the story as Gaelic was the original tongue of what is now known as Ireland.

I liked it

Its not all that uncommon a Gaelic name and I happen to know a few here in the states with that name as well. This looks like its headed in a good direction.

Good story but...

it's spelt YEAH. Annoying as hell.

Good start – looking promising. I like the Gaelic. Like the fact that she's ordinary in appearance, both main characters thus far seem like decent sorts . . . and on to chapter 2.

MORE !!!!!!!!!!!!!

NOW PLEASE this is great !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Love it need information!!

i love this series and would love to know how it all ends! I read every single chapter and am anticipating more. Out of curiosity i was wondering what kind of werewolf traits did you have, according to what i have found there are different kinds. I just wanted to know if you just made up parts or did you find something that fit well into the story with Cullen. I'm currently writing stories of my own and i love where you are going with things, and has inspired me to write such an awesome series. if this is confusing i'm sorry. Anyway i hope you keep writing or turn this into a book because it is mesmerizing and captivating

So far, so good!

Intriguing characters! A good beginning :)

Great first chapter!

Thanks for posting

Spelling

Please, if you're going to use a word often, know how to spell it. It's "yeah", not "yhea." It distracted me from the story and got annoying after a bit.

yhea

either, neither, yeah,yhea. Live with it! It's just a word and doesn't change the story at all. Keep up the good work!!

Love it!

So good, and hot and well-written, can't wait to read more! xxx

First chapter & I'm hooked!

Wow! Just the first chapter & I'm hooked! So looking forward to the rest of the story! :) Thanks!

Great start.

I've been called "the proofreader from hell" but I was so into the story I missed most of the spelling and grammatical errors others are talking about!
Yes, I noticed "Yhea", and the use of able where capable would be better, but that's it. I've read edited stories with lots more annoying errors.
Sure, get an editor to make it even better, but don't fret the comments about errors.

ausvirgo...

Your editing is fine. The story is fine. Don't listen to the nasty comments

back again

this is my 3rd read