Leader of the Pack Ch. 01

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Well done! I thoroughly enjoyed this story and hope you keep writing more.

Thanks,
Andrew

great job

i love the mystery of aislinn. please add more to the story and soon! loved the build up with the characters.

I hope you continue this story!

You've started a really interesting story- I hope more chapters follow soon!

Enjoyed this

Really enjoyed this story, i hope you add more of it shortly! Thanks for a great read.

awesome

one of the best stories i have read pleaseee add on

gotta write some more soon!

this is really interesting and such a new kinda branch on the old tree (so to say) with all the folks here writing about non-human animal to human beings & this is very interesting! whooo hoooo! I will be checking for a new chapter...

Great!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Fantastic Beginning!

Mystery, intrigue, & the possibility of hot romance! What more could we want? More please.

Excellent!!!!

Well, you've got me hooked. I'll be waiting on the next chapter please. Thanks.

Wow!

Ready for more. Though the Yhea is odd. Most people spell it 'Yeah'.

Amazing

first chapter. I really can't wait to read more!

Very good beginning

You have the makings of a very good story here. I would suggest looking around for an editor - there are some volunteer editors right here on this site. Certain parts could flow a bit better. But overall, this is a very compelling first chapter and I look forward to more. (And I also noticed the Yhea - was that just a strange typo?)

A fine start...

I hope there's more to come. I like the natural way the two gravitated toward one another.

Great

Just two words: Publish it.

Intriguing beginning

It's obvious what Cullen is, but just what is Aislinn? I'm heading to the next chapter already.

Congratulations!

Congratulations on the award for Cullen! It is richly deserved. His character exudes a sensual quality that you have captured fantastically! He and his fellow characters are simply wonderful! Great job!

Delicious

With the resurgence of romance/supernatural adventures many authors are making their names, and your foray does the genre proud. Keep up the good work.

compelling.

beautifully written. the characters really drew me in to this story. a little bit of constructive criticism though... it needs a bit of editing. some of the words dont flow as well as they could. and i have to agree with some of the others on your spelling of the word yeah. when i see it spelled yhea it really is just odd. my mind doesnt accept it. i keep seeing typo typo typo. haha but all in all it really is wonderful.

Holy fuck...

That was... Incredible. Congratulations on altering my breathing patterns, making my heart skip a beat, and making my mouth gape. Pure-bred amazing. =D

Great Work!

I loved this submission. You obviously spent timing planning both the characters and the plot. I am glad I started reading these when you had already posted so many so I won't have to wait to read more! I have to admit, the yhea bothered me, but it has nothing to do with the quality of the writing.

nice

great plot, something a lot of authers on this site often forget to add. might want to spread things out a bit though, feels like you've taken 2 or 3 paragraphs and compressed it into 1 at times

Yippee!!

Oh goodness hot writing with a plot too! Oh happy day! Great writing and I can't wait to read what else you've written in this series. You have a great presence on the page as you write and your characters really stick it to you. Wonderful job, kudos.

awesome!

really good. my only comment:

"yeah" not "yhea"

it was just a little distracting to read.

perfect

Ive read all there is in this series. This is the second time I've read this chapter, becuase there was nothing left after the epilouge : ( which was a cliff hanger. are you going to post another addition? It still makes my heart skip a beat when I read this. You are a great writer.

I want me a wolf!

What an excellently delicious intro. Intricately woven character development - love it. (sigh) I would give almost anything for men like this to truly exist.

I love this series!

Great writing! I love the romantic setting! Keep it up!

A great opening

I just finished a second reading of the first chapter after having gone through the whole story once. I wanted to because, even though I took my time, I still thought I rushed through it.

But this was an exceptional introduction chapter that you crafted for your characters. You built up their primary characteristics quickly but thoroughly as well. I do hope that you still are planning to write more of the second book soon. :)

Love it

Totally loved this story and the other chapters. One of my favs!

Wow...

I was kinda put off for a moment by the vampire blood bit, because as cool as Twilight might sound, I just don't like fanfiction that much anymore. So I looked up the names, found zero relation to Twilight, and kept reading.

I must say, I'm very pleased, and I never come here for such slow-moving stories. I have a lot of commentary, but the more I get into it, the more I lose it. But bottom line, this story (with some proofreading and possibly minor editing) is quite the read so far. I'll be looking into subsequent chapters...and jotting up an account.

~Aehr~

Great so far...

Except for the Yhea thing. That misspelling kept pulling me out of the story.

What can I say???....I luv luv it..

Im in love.

The tension is amazing!

Wow!! I love this story

Dude

learn to have someone proof read your story or something because there are way to many spelling errors and it gets in the way of the story

back again

rereading one of my favourite stories here once more :)

Dry opinion

Intriguing ...

Amazing!

Just... amazing! I love it so far. Off to the next one!

Yes!

Please write another chapter of this!

hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm ......looking promising

Doll-
Off to a good start...............I like it~!~

As many times as I have read this series...

It's still a favorite. And in Chapter 1, the story hasn't even hit full stride.

Starts high and gets better.

Cullen and Aislinn are wonderful characters and a great couple...(although you're not supposed to know that yet!)

Hey GimletEdge:

Like we're not supposed to figure out that Cullen and Aislinn are supposed to be a couple......

To the two comments below:

Hahaha. :)

Wow

For a first chapter well done onto the next...

I've read the whole series...

And you know the storyline is kinda similar to that of the film Underworld?
It's a film about a war between Lycans and Vampires and then one of the vampires falls in love with a human, and meanwhile the Lycans are trying to create a hybrid super-species.
I dunno if you've watched it, but they are similar.

spoiler!!!

dude you just ruined the entire story for the rest of us!!!! if you wanted to tell the author that their story was like a movie you should have sent them a personal message!!!!!!

Spoiler......Seriously!!!!!

No one does dat its annoying send a private feedback, or put spoiler like three times so we wouldnt read it steupzzz.....Ny who loving d first chap :)
xoxo
Aria

AMAZING!

Reading this so far, it sounds like a professional book. You are amazing and this is so compelling! I adore it! :) *loves*

good story

and your a dick for ruining it for future readers.

geez

its nothing like that movie!

I find it extremely annoying that the leading lady has such a ridiculous name. It makes me not want to read this story but I have been wanting to read a good werewolf story for a couple of weeks now. So I'll carry on because the author's writing isn't that bad. There were some grammatical errors and some sentences that should be changed to make more sense. Sorry for being so harsh but ridiculous names annoy me to no end. On a brighter note, the plot so far is really great and I'm extremely curious to see what happens next.