It's a good start, how about adding more to it? If people want Professional quality writings then they should go to the book store and buy a book from a well known Professional Writer. As I see it Literotica is for fun, a way to express yourself, share with millions of others like you that like erotic stories, not for pay and fame. Isopropyl great job and keep them coming.....
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Anonymous11/18/07
ever read thru your shit before submitting it?
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Anonymous11/23/07
The role of organisms
I'm pretty sure that all of these organisms are spreading a sexual epidemic.
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Anonymous07/20/08
Criticism
"ever read thru your shit before submitting it?" You ever think before you type? The people who write these stories are NOT professionals. They need CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, not brain dead morons spouting off at the mouth. For example; You spell the word thru as THROUGH. Most ten year olds know that.
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Anonymous03/28/09
good but
good but if you can't use a dictionary and spell correctly then please don't submit any stories grammar and punctuation is not as critical as correct spelling and using the right words
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Anonymous01/31/10
dads a ass
sounds like the dads an asshole and the mom should divorce him so the three of them can keep haveing all the sex they want without hiding
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Anonymous03/11/10
"mom was anxious for me to stick my cock up her twat"
This is a fine story (forget the nit-pickers) of a lusty young motherfucker and sisterhumper by a gifted author. 18-year-old Rick has a "problem"--his big dick is constantly hard and everyone in his family can see the big bulge under his fly. Tight-assed dad is outraged, but mom and sis are intrigued, their cunts leak at the sight of what the boy's got jumping in his pants. First his sexy sister comes to the rescue and fits as much she can of her brother's big prick in her mouth, then up her sisterly snatch. Fuck, does little brother have a bazooka down there! Sis loves it and loves how Rick stretches her cunt. Then it's his mother's turn to use her twat to help out her boy. Rick shoves his big dick up his own mother's cunt, the best place for any son, and unloads his hot young balls where his creamy sperm is meant to go! At 18, Rick's balls never quit, and the family twats are always thirsty for what the boy's balls produce and his stiff prick delivers. Excellent!
English
Organisms????
OK story - but "organisms"!!??!?!!!?????
You people are too fucking critical
God, it's fucking amateur writing. Give the guy a break.
Good story
It's a good start, how about adding more to it? If people want Professional quality writings then they should go to the book store and buy a book from a well known Professional Writer. As I see it Literotica is for fun, a way to express yourself, share with millions of others like you that like erotic stories, not for pay and fame. Isopropyl great job and keep them coming.....
ever read thru your shit before submitting it?
The role of organisms
I'm pretty sure that all of these organisms are spreading a sexual epidemic.
Criticism
"ever read thru your shit before submitting it?" You ever think before you type? The people who write these stories are NOT professionals. They need CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, not brain dead morons spouting off at the mouth. For example; You spell the word thru as THROUGH. Most ten year olds know that.
good but
good but if you can't use a dictionary and spell correctly then please don't submit any stories grammar and punctuation is not as critical as correct spelling and using the right words
dads a ass
sounds like the dads an asshole and the mom should divorce him so the three of them can keep haveing all the sex they want without hiding
"mom was anxious for me to stick my cock up her twat"
This is a fine story (forget the nit-pickers) of a lusty young motherfucker and sisterhumper by a gifted author. 18-year-old Rick has a "problem"--his big dick is constantly hard and everyone in his family can see the big bulge under his fly. Tight-assed dad is outraged, but mom and sis are intrigued, their cunts leak at the sight of what the boy's got jumping in his pants. First his sexy sister comes to the rescue and fits as much she can of her brother's big prick in her mouth, then up her sisterly snatch. Fuck, does little brother have a bazooka down there! Sis loves it and loves how Rick stretches her cunt. Then it's his mother's turn to use her twat to help out her boy. Rick shoves his big dick up his own mother's cunt, the best place for any son, and unloads his hot young balls where his creamy sperm is meant to go! At 18, Rick's balls never quit, and the family twats are always thirsty for what the boy's balls produce and his stiff prick delivers. Excellent!
nice
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