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Xcept
You forgot to
Zeduce me...
Well this was fun
Interesting effect of having the occasional longer line insert a personal touch in contrast to the impact of all the lines that end with "me," Something like the lines ending in "me" have a feeling of being an impersonal chant that the longer lines break through to give a touch of the real you.
Xtra fun, you Zena!
Either great minds think alike or lorencino simply plantes a secret chip in my brain...
But I had the exact thoughts regarding this one, namely the longer lines were indeed a breather, both in term of rhythm and in th equality of the personal expression copmpared with the repetitious X -me on the rest of the lines. You could easily twick it a bit to add some variety to the rest aswell. Fun read overall!
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