To the readers. Thank you for the wonderful comments and feedback on this story. Part 3 is the final part and has been submitted. Please look for it in the next day or two.
Your comments are always welcome and appreciated.
DG Hear
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Anonymous11/19/07
Again a great story!!
DG I just love your stories and this one is not exception. Thanks for sharing your gift and look forward to the final part.
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Anonymous11/19/07
wonderful
This is such a wonderful story! It almost made me cry! Im sure the next chapter definitely will make me cry! hehe and i cant wait! Thanks for writing!
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Anonymous11/19/07
Good Story
Only negative - there was too much almost word-for-word from first chapter. But story and how it moved were great. Look forward to next part.
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Anonymous11/19/07
Wonderful Story
DJ,
I always enjoy your stories You seem to have a knack for writing "real life" stories.
I see myself as a character in your stories. I can feel the emotional twists experienced by the character, James.
When I was a kid, I experienced a few situations that had my emotions tightly knoted-up. And, for the last 40 years or so I have asked myself, "What if?"
Thanks for rekindling my memories.
I'll be eager to see what happens to Angel and James.
This is a good storyline. I have to say that the rehash (background) of Angel Marie was too much of the exact same story without much dissimilar thoughts coming through from her. I feel it would have been better if you had condensed it and pointed out any unique feelings she had. Now I am not a writer so take these suggestions with that fact in mind.Thank you for the great entertaining Love Story.PT
DG, my man, I think you've probably telegraphed where Part 3 is going to go. Jim is going to end up at her hospital, but because she goes by Angel and not Marie, it's going to take a little bit before they realize he's right there under her nose. Even though we know where you're going, getting there is all the fun with a DG story. Another winner from a great writer.
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Anonymous11/20/07
You are a great writer
DG, I have been reading your stories for a long time. I just wanted to say thanks. Your stories are not filled with the raunchy deviate sex, but rather loving and caring. Keep it up and can't wait to read more or yours.
Problems with POVs that repeat already told portions of the plot.
I appreciate what you tried to do with Angel Marie's telling of her background and her weekend with Jim. However, I felt there was just too much repeating of chapter one.
I ended up skipping through much of chapter two but I am still enjoying your story.
The other POV explains a lot of the happenings in the first chapter and deepens the characterization. Note the high score this chapter ran up... I would only comment that her apparent reaction to the walkout was weak.
I was surprised that one complained about the "unlikely" encounter with a deer in Indiana. It happened to my wife and daughter when they were on their way to Indianapolis Airport in1997! Luckily the deer reversed direction and only put a small dent in the card and I believe lived to tell his children to stay off highways in a fog...
But why not leave her contact info when she left the message for him?
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Anonymous02/11/15
Sweet romantic story. But is has an obvious character fault.
Jim had no reason to mistrust her when she said she was performing a platonic escort service for her last job. Unless he just didn't trust her anyway, which brings the whole romance into question. So, if he would trust her when she said she was quitting the business, why not trust her when she says she's doing this last platonic job? If he really thought she was lying, and was gong to screw someone after telling him she wasn't, then why wouldn't she lie about all of it, quitting the business, being faithful, etc. So in my opinion Jim revealed he was never going to trust her, or his decision to not trust her for this one incident is a mistake in the plot. It makes no sense for him to trust her assertion that she quitting the business, but not the assertion that this last job is innocent.
But otherwise its a cute story, with an obvious conclusion. Still worth some casual reading time. Thanks.
English
nice surpise
As usual a nice romantic story.
I'm looking forward to the next part.
Great stuff!!!!
Yes, an excellent Part 2 told from Marie's point of view. Looking forward to Part 3 which I assume will be the final part??? Pete.
You are a wonderful story teller
You are a terrific story teller. I look forward to each of your stories keep them coming
Thank you!
To the readers. Thank you for the wonderful comments and feedback on this story. Part 3 is the final part and has been submitted. Please look for it in the next day or two.
Your comments are always welcome and appreciated.
DG Hear
Again a great story!!
DG I just love your stories and this one is not exception. Thanks for sharing your gift and look forward to the final part.
wonderful
This is such a wonderful story! It almost made me cry! Im sure the next chapter definitely will make me cry! hehe and i cant wait! Thanks for writing!
Good Story
Only negative - there was too much almost word-for-word from first chapter. But story and how it moved were great. Look forward to next part.
Wonderful Story
DJ,
I always enjoy your stories You seem to have a knack for writing "real life" stories.
I see myself as a character in your stories. I can feel the emotional twists experienced by the character, James.
When I was a kid, I experienced a few situations that had my emotions tightly knoted-up. And, for the last 40 years or so I have asked myself, "What if?"
Thanks for rekindling my memories.
I'll be eager to see what happens to Angel and James.
Sid
Just a Great Romance story in progress
This is a good storyline. I have to say that the rehash (background) of Angel Marie was too much of the exact same story without much dissimilar thoughts coming through from her. I feel it would have been better if you had condensed it and pointed out any unique feelings she had. Now I am not a writer so take these suggestions with that fact in mind.Thank you for the great entertaining Love Story.PT
getting there's the treat
DG, my man, I think you've probably telegraphed where Part 3 is going to go. Jim is going to end up at her hospital, but because she goes by Angel and not Marie, it's going to take a little bit before they realize he's right there under her nose. Even though we know where you're going, getting there is all the fun with a DG story. Another winner from a great writer.
You are a great writer
DG, I have been reading your stories for a long time. I just wanted to say thanks. Your stories are not filled with the raunchy deviate sex, but rather loving and caring. Keep it up and can't wait to read more or yours.
Problems with POVs that repeat already told portions of the plot.
I appreciate what you tried to do with Angel Marie's telling of her background and her weekend with Jim. However, I felt there was just too much repeating of chapter one.
I ended up skipping through much of chapter two but I am still enjoying your story.
Thanks
No Complaint
The other POV explains a lot of the happenings in the first chapter and deepens the characterization. Note the high score this chapter ran up... I would only comment that her apparent reaction to the walkout was weak.
Memories
I was surprised that one complained about the "unlikely" encounter with a deer in Indiana. It happened to my wife and daughter when they were on their way to Indianapolis Airport in1997! Luckily the deer reversed direction and only put a small dent in the card and I believe lived to tell his children to stay off highways in a fog...
Nice -
It works for me - she is honest so is he - it really could work -
Neither s a blushing virgin - so what - she was not in it for the sex -
I Guess It Would Ruin The Story...
But why not leave her contact info when she left the message for him?
Sweet romantic story. But is has an obvious character fault.
Jim had no reason to mistrust her when she said she was performing a platonic escort service for her last job. Unless he just didn't trust her anyway, which brings the whole romance into question. So, if he would trust her when she said she was quitting the business, why not trust her when she says she's doing this last platonic job? If he really thought she was lying, and was gong to screw someone after telling him she wasn't, then why wouldn't she lie about all of it, quitting the business, being faithful, etc. So in my opinion Jim revealed he was never going to trust her, or his decision to not trust her for this one incident is a mistake in the plot. It makes no sense for him to trust her assertion that she quitting the business, but not the assertion that this last job is innocent.
But otherwise its a cute story, with an obvious conclusion. Still worth some casual reading time. Thanks.
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