All Comments on 'I Lost My Virginity to My Fantasy'

Sorry but I didn't like it that much. You rushed it too much. Slow down a bit, expand on your detail and I think you'll make a better story where people can get into it. This was kind of wham, bang, thank you ma'am which ruined the enjoyment factor not to mention that I highly doubt that a virgin would enjoy being double penetrated when she's never had sex before. Very unrealistic. Your writing shows promise just give more detail and perhaps explore your characters some more.

A bit more expository detail _would_ be in order, but a nice beginning, and I quite like where it's going.

a virgin would feel PAIN.

make another story following this 1! its very good

hell yes please do

Yes pls continue

NO NO NO NO NO. DO NOT CONTINUE!!

You have either a very vivid imagination or a serious emotional problem. Or both.

But you have talent.

Your story is well written, but that's the only good thing I can say about it. It's not just a girl giving her virginity to a guy whom she idolizes; it's brutal, vicious gang rape. Every last one of those apes should be castrated and then shot through the head. And your girl is sick, sick, sick. She needs a few years of restorative therapy, and then a few decades in a mental institution.

If your Chaz came near my daughter, I'd shoot him on sight.

I found it totally disgusting. I hope to all the Gods that this is pure fiction.

Try to write something else; something decent.

Lack of detail, rushed and not well done at all. If you're going to write in this garbage detail, then I say don't bother continuing. Find a new hobby