by Five_Eight
This is a thoroughly entertaining story, and well-written (a few minor writing flaws, but let's not quibble). I loved the twist in the ending.
-- KK in Texas
Needs more steamy sex, but otherwise well written.
On a scale of 1 to ten, this rates an "oh my God..."
The title got me hooked, and I wasn't disappointed. Reading it, a voice like a young, Blade Runner-esque Harrison Ford kept narrating it in my mind. Loved the detail, the pacing... with just enough sex in the story to keep it from a "Non-Erotic" rating in Literotica, I never once rolled my eyes or felt like reaching for an editor's red pen as I so often do here.
Once again confirming my conviction that Literotica is more a writer's workshop than anything else. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
The story is not bad but there are a few mistakes that should have been taken care off before posting
I liked the setting of the story. Reminded me a bit of "Shadowrun" with a bit more sex thrown in.
Since I don't know a great deal about Japan I can't really say accurate the description of Japanese criminals or geishas were.
To those who complained about the descriptions of the girl's fascination with a "big American cock"... it's a FANTASY, lol!
If you're looking for realism, I think the literotica Sc-Fi/Fantasy section might just be the wrong place to look...
Beautiful futuristic writing. I could really visualize it. This would make a great video game. :D