I didn't notice too many grammatical mistakes, liked the characters, but..... it just seemed like once the sister was in the house you either lost interest in bothering to write the story or you just rushed to get it done. I'm not sure which, but the rapid dialog shifts and sex acts all seemed forced.
loved the story line! Great job! hope Tabby cums "home" again
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Anonymous06/26/10
used
like others said the end was rushed like you didn't care anymore also it seems that he loved her but she just used him as usual if you continue and she looks him up again he should tell her to stay away that he is tired of being used and will not put up with it any longer
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Anonymous07/19/12
Future
Very nice...ever think of a follow up story later on?
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Anonymous04/10/15
fair story
i would have given it a 5 star if she would have stayed and raised the baby with her brother this ending ruined the story for me
English
A rush to the end?
I didn't notice too many grammatical mistakes, liked the characters, but..... it just seemed like once the sister was in the house you either lost interest in bothering to write the story or you just rushed to get it done. I'm not sure which, but the rapid dialog shifts and sex acts all seemed forced.
screw
Screw the story, loved the setup, made me soooooo wet. Brilliant background, and when does Tabby cum back?
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loved the story line! Great job! hope Tabby cums "home" again
used
like others said the end was rushed like you didn't care anymore also it seems that he loved her but she just used him as usual if you continue and she looks him up again he should tell her to stay away that he is tired of being used and will not put up with it any longer
Future
Very nice...ever think of a follow up story later on?
fair story
i would have given it a 5 star if she would have stayed and raised the baby with her brother this ending ruined the story for me
Loved the story -
....... but hated the ending - sorry !
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