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Deserves to be "red"
OK there are some grammar problems. I can't throw rocks though! I've always thought that this kind of incest story wasn't really incest at all. The love between a mother and daughter is special even without the sex. The sex seems to be such a natural fit though. Nice story, and very hot.
mmmmmm
Lick me Mommy
good sex
this was a great story...
it talked a little to much about the people and their lives
a perfect story has about a paragraph for people and their story and a paragraph for the description of the characters.
the rest about the sex
overall great story
chris
AMAZING
This story was terrific. I found my self touching my own tities and moaning as I read on!!! Excellent!
CRITIQUE
MORE DETAIL ON THE SEXUAL CONTACT AND LESS OF PERSON'S DESCRPTIONS ET AL. MUST BALANCE. STORY ENDS TOO ABRUPTLY AFTER A NICE BUILD-UP
If I may suggest---The Literotica format does not
lend itself to long paragraphs--Next time try to limit your paragraphs to 4-6 lines---Set up your word processor to give you about 70 spaces per line which is what Lit uses
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