All Comments on 'Oh Holy Hot Tub'

by zipp2

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AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Erotic if you like slut wives who cheat on their

husbands and take risk with bareback sex with strangers. But the story is almost ruined by all of the spelling errors that make you say, what. A good editor or proof reader would do you a world of good.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
other people are assholes

i liked it. yes there are spelling errors but it kept me reading, and not everyone is a fucking english major.

good job!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Good job indeed

Please ignore the comments below. Some Literotica readers hate stories where young white women let old black men pleasure them. But they love to spend time reading - and knocking - such stories.

A sequel about this hot couple would be much appreciated.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Perhaps a sequel

Where she sucks Zeck's cock right after communion in the church's baptistry. AND THEN HER HUSBAND IS REWARDED WITH A CREAMPIE AND A HOLY SNOWBALL from his wife's cunt and mouth.

Maybe a little bundle of joy conceived on Chrismas eve blacker than Coley's ass that she claims to her husband that a black angel had come down from on high and simply visited her and impregnated her by sheer spirit power.

She can convince Don to minister to the good reverend (suck his cock) to gey her ready for the child's christening with cum.

Zeck seems to be a real man of the cloth and she should fuck him always forsaking her husband and taking new vows to forsake her husband and fuck only Zeck because he had made her cum.

Harryin VAHarryin VAover 16 years ago
I dont get it

when everyone got out of the hot tub except for the wife and preacher WHY didnt SHE slide away ?

since that question is not answered... the rest of the story makes no sense.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
I Like It!

I don't give a damn if it's not the Shakespeare of our times, or if it's unreal. I want a story with a hot situation to jack off at it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
great story

Sorry for all the bad comments. I thought people came here to read stories, not find every error in there stories. I guess the person that says people don't cheat on christmas eve, they must feel better about them self for only cheating all the other days but christmas time. LOL

Great story hope there is more to cum.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Crouch?

I have read and heard it called many things - but never before have I heard it called a CROUCH!!

Good story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
good story but...

story was hot, and too bad if people didn't like the Christmas eve/preacher aspect. I have to admit though that the typos were a bit annoying only because they took my concentration off of the story. but i'm not bashing you ;) i did like it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Good story

and what a bunch of assholes... If this kind of story bothers you "DON'T FUCKING READ IT"

AmyfriendAmyfriendover 16 years ago
Great story,

with some very hot scenes. It would make a great sequel when they get back to N.Y. and the Preacher visits. But I would suggest that you re-read a few times before submitting. Maybe even let a third party re-read to avoid minor glitches.

BazzzBazzzover 16 years ago
Very hot story

I really liked reading this one. I am not sure if Non Consent is the right place for this one. Sure the black man was very forward but he was just taking what was ultimately given to him. Also you may want to proof read the story more thoroughly before posting it. While spell check takes care of the misspellings it won't correct a word that is spelled correctly but put in the story by mistake. You also mentioned that you were on fire too many times. Get a Thesaurus and use it to find words that are similar and often times much more descriptive. You did very well with this one great job. Please keep writing these kinds of interrcial soties

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
good imagination

Got a real kick out of this yarn. Keep em coming. And to all the uptight, moralistic redneck preachers out there, get the fuck out of here and go read the bible rather than slamming the efforts of those who produce while all you do is criticize and spew your poisonous racism.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Zipless fuck, I think it's called

Really liked your story. my first wife loved being groped on crowded buses and elevators. Even lost her panties to a complete stranger that fingered her to near orgasm before she realized she missed her stop! Keep 'em coming.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Loved the Story

I absolutely LOVED the story and really hope there's a sequel back in NYC. She just has to take him inher husband's bed, and just has to beg him to take her over and over.

RansomRansomover 16 years ago
Really enjoyed the story

I look forward to more of this story. This was hot and definetely had me wanting to read more. Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Okay

I think the scenario was dirty and hot, although I don't understand why the stranger had to be black (or brown, or red, or yellow for that matter). A stranger with a big cock and a nasty attitude would have been fine with me. Of course you had a lot of misspelled words so you may wish to find a proofreader, but otherwise, I enjoyed it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
great

I would love to know if something more happens with this story. I love the excitement it brings. Smiling.

MsAnn

scotts2488scotts2488over 16 years ago

great story....only it kind of cooled off with the spelling errors near the end

woodnymph214woodnymph214over 16 years ago
liked it...

very hot story..i have to agree about getting a second person to read it though...if you would like you can email future stories to me and I will check them out for spelling before you turn them in....

seniorlovingseniorlovingover 16 years ago
Outstanding

Loved the story. A different take on a well-worn topic

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Wish I was a woman!

I really empathized with this 20 something babe. She got such good sex from God's messenger, that I envied her being a woman. I guess I'd like to be a woman and be screwed so competently.

At this point we don't know if the pastor enjoyed giving, but receiving was certainly plenty holy in this situation. Oh, the pleasure of receiving great cock, and great animal style sex!

Having the hero of this story BLACK added a welcome taboo virtue. Author has a great future in this mileau.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Braindead Nonsense But ---

Offensive because of the Oh Holy Whore of the season plus the need for a braindead wimp and the usual humongous black cock with bareback bastard baby possibility.<P>

Doesn't anyone know how to avoid wimpy braindead husbands in an interracial story - they ruin any consideration other than absurd stroke.<P>

With your talent plausibly used and a proofreader you could do much better writer.

budap01budap01over 16 years ago
Excellent plot!

But i'm so bored with the hypocritical and racist comments that always accompany stories with this topic.

Some of you hate stories about older black men with younger white women. Still you read them. And find pleasure in venting your spleen over the writer. What bizarre masochism!

I really would love to read more about Susan and Zeck. I sense that their NY encounter will be even hotter than the one in the tub! Zeck simply is Susan's kind of man...

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Nice Concept

I would be interested in future chapters....and ignore the negatives, this is fiction if you enjoyed writing it, great........they do not need to read it

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Wrong Category; otherwise

It wasn't a NonConsent/Reluctance story. Once I realized it was not, I changed my mindset and did enjoy it. Proofread the story and place it in one of the more appropriate categories like Interracial Love, Erotic Couplings, Mature, Loving Wives, or Exhibitionist & Voyeur.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
crotch, not crouch

"swimming suite" "he didn't relies" "I just kept quite" "the leg whole of my bikini" "he had a better angel" "my young welling body" "My eyes pleased with him not to hurt me" "I rapped it and hid it" And for fuck's sake, you used semicolons, but don't know what commas are for? Wrong category, too. And the usual tired cliches. Other than those things, the story really sucked.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Good but GEEZ!

The story actually worked for me. It was good but your spelling was so awful I found myself laughing. I hope you spelled that way only as a spoof on "Pornotica." If not it was really really bad. Otherwise a good story that kept me reading, cliches and all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Good story

I liked the story. Unlike some of the people here that keep cutting the author down...if you don't like it don't read it. All the "Anonymous" negative commenters think they can do better? Let's see it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago

I like the idea of this story. ~wink~ My comment just echoes what other people have already said about your spelling and a possible miscategorization... Other than that, the story could be considered Hot by some. Looking forward to your next (spell-checked!) story...

SlickTonySlickTonyover 16 years ago
Editor! Editor!

I really don't understand these people who diss a story because it happens to be in a category they don't like. I thought the black guy turning out to be a preacher was a nice twist--sometimes older black guys can exude a powerful sexual attraction. (I don't imagine old bluesmen go without if they don't want to.) But Lordy, Zipp! Get a copy editor. Everybody who's said that is saying no more than the truth. This story has more of the kind of errors that shouldn't appear in a finished product than a dog has fleas.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Spell check...?

As many others have said, your spelling and grammar were absolutely terrible! With all of the technology these days, how do you not check something so important?

Other than that, the story wasn't terrible, but it was hindered greatly by all of the errors. I didn't hate it, but I can't respect it, either.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Offensive

Offensive

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Who could not love the depth of this plot

"Nice guy" loses wife to well endowed Black preacher, with just the touch of his huge holiday giving penis,in front of his family and hers, and on the filthy floor of a public toilet, all on the eve of Christ's Birth. AND HE GAVE HER WHAT SHE SO WANTED, FOR CHRISTMAS. Look out Tolstoy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Despite...

...the numerous typos this is a very erotic story and I would love to see a sequel.

zipp2zipp2over 16 years agoAuthor
Wow! what an outpouring of love.

First I want to thank everyone that left feedback for this story be it negative or positive. I am overwhelmed.

Thanks to all of you that left positive feedback, I know that a lot of you are like me and want to read this kind of story.

Thanks to all of you that left negative feedback, some of it was really helpful and helped me find errors. I have posted an edited story, its still not perfect, as none of my stories will be. It is better than it was and I want to thank everyone that helped me find the problems.

I guess many of you are still reading the comments on this story. I want you to know that none of the positive anonymous comments are from me.

Thanks to everyone … Merry Christmas!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Still offensive

Isn't your deleting of all the negative comments the same result as if you made many positive comments?

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Still offensive

Isn't your deleting of all the negative comments the same result as if you made many positive comments?

zipp2zipp2over 16 years agoAuthor
No.. not the same.

At the beginning of all my stories I post a disclaimer about the content. In this case Interracial sex, this type of sex is not offensive to some and these people find it very erotic. Like others have said many times below, if you don’t like this kind of story, then don’t read them. I do however find someone who posts twice very offensive. I will delete any comment that only addresses this point of the story. Also this is the last time I will address an anonymous comment.

BazzzBazzzover 16 years ago
Well said Zipp

I couldn't agree more with your comment. Anyone who posts an anonymous comment forfeits his/her right to keep it from being deleted. I don't care what you've written as a comment. If you won't leave your name then forget about whining when it is deleted.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
So hot!

Offensive... offensive...

Why do all these hypocrites spend time reading stories they _know_ will "offend" them?

Their illiberal project is: stop people from writing stories that according to their own narrow standards are "offensive".

I _love_ stories about beautiful young white women who succumb to big old black men!

And I am looking forward to read about Zeck showing Susans husband how a woman should be treated!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Loved it too

Never mind spelling mistakes or wrong category. Unimportant.

Important: a good plot and hot action.

Who are all these people whose hobby it is to witchhunt writers who write stories about old black men with young women?

Only US citizens can be so easily offended. Surely?

A sequel please!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Sequel?

Needs a sequel.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
wow, what a story!

Never expect to read such an erotic story. At the beginning, I just scanned thru it roughly since it was in the catagory that I am not interested, but your writing is just exquisite, and I can sense your faith that the story is plausibly wtitten. So I go on, I felt so lucky to have given it a chance. Thank god that I did! I have to wait reading the sequel until the next day because I have already spent twice. I just need a break, lol.

Keep it going, man, you are one of the best, if not the best!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
perfect

Love to have the jets blasting on my asshole as I stroke off. Feels like hes pounding my ass.. Mmmmm feels so nice.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago

Booo

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
spelling

This is ruined by poor English and terrible spelling.

TigersmanTigersmanalmost 9 years ago
Good story

This is definitely a good story. I liked the fact the wife discovered that the preacher was the man who gave her the best fucking of her life. You needed to mention if the wife was taking birth control or not, if she was fertile or if she was ovulating. A really good ending would have been the wife discovering she had been bred black.

Thrak111Thrak111over 7 years ago
Great!

Love the intense hot tub scene. Very, very hot!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
The husband knew what was going on the whole time.

There is really not much you can do when a bigger, older black man starts putting the moves on your wife.

Bigger dick+more experience=white husband spectator.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Holy...

...Moley. Uhm. Nasty twist at the end, but too much of this is too real!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
LOVE IT, GAVE YOU A 5.0 [100% (⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐)]!

Very very erotic. It also is reasonably realistic.

Susan, the young wife, is a KEEPER. Period.

* * *

Actually Susan reminds me of my first wife: if a man is nice to her but makes it clear that he wants to get in her pants, she was his for the taking. That marriage did not last long, but lasted long enough for me to discover my own voyeur side.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
LOVE (❤) it: ☆☆☆☆☆ (5.0=100%)! 👍 :) 😊

The wife is a keeper. Period.

Women like her make this world a happier place.

I think this story is a composite based on many true events.

veryaverageginaveryaverageginaabout 3 years ago

I don't know what it is about reluctant teasing that makes me horny. The thought of a man slowly flicking my clit, sliding a finger between my lips, and driving deep while simply passing the time away as if nothing is happening. That's some good shit.

The errors are messing up the raw tease, though. Please find a better proofreader.

brady20brady20almost 3 years ago

Awesome story Zech was A man who knew what he wanted he knew Susan was a hot young wife

so he wentered for her young pussy Susan knew she wanted this strange man cock

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Great story , I loved it

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I love how she stays quiet and lets him do what he wants to her. If she was my wife I would love her being so easy for blackmen take and fuck. Taking a married white woman he just met at a party into the back room and using her anyway he wants. It would make me so hot to see her being led into the back room and seeing the cum on her thigh, or better to go back and find three men watching as she’s treated like a blackcock slut by their friend. Asking if she’s my wife they tell me they’ll be done in a minute.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

I'm copy pasting an earlier comment in lieu of my own:

"Anon about 2 years ago

LOVE IT, GAVE YOU A

5.0 [100% (⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐)]!

Very very erotic. It also is reasonably realistic.

Susan, the young wife, is a KEEPER. Period.

* * *

Actually Susan reminds me of my first wife: if a man is nice to her but makes it clear that he wants to get in her pants, she was his for the taking. That marriage did not last long, but lasted long enough for me to discover my own voyeur side. ❤"

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

❤❤

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

This is my all time favorite. So hot because she never anticipated to would happen. It did. Nothing like Zech fucking her from behind like a bull.

bigsiddbigsiddalmost 2 years ago

I love this story.

merrySMmerrySMover 1 year ago

Love this story. The errors didn't offend me, you write with such purpose keeping the story moving.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Loved it, I’ve been felt up under the table by a few ladies over the years and a guy for that matter. It’s always so exciting when someone is handling you in public even if no one can see.

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