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Oh Holy Hot Tub

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Erotic if you like slut wives who cheat on their

husbands and take risk with bareback sex with strangers. But the story is almost ruined by all of the spelling errors that make you say, what. A good editor or proof reader would do you a world of good.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

other people are assholes

i liked it. yes there are spelling errors but it kept me reading, and not everyone is a fucking english major.

good job!

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Good job indeed

Please ignore the comments below. Some Literotica readers hate stories where young white women let old black men pleasure them. But they love to spend time reading - and knocking - such stories.
A sequel about this hot couple would be much appreciated.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Perhaps a sequel

Where she sucks Zeck's cock right after communion in the church's baptistry. AND THEN HER HUSBAND IS REWARDED WITH A CREAMPIE AND A HOLY SNOWBALL from his wife's cunt and mouth.

Maybe a little bundle of joy conceived on Chrismas eve blacker than Coley's ass that she claims to her husband that a black angel had come down from on high and simply visited her and impregnated her by sheer spirit power.

She can convince Don to minister to the good reverend (suck his cock) to gey her ready for the child's christening with cum.

Zeck seems to be a real man of the cloth and she should fuck him always forsaking her husband and taking new vows to forsake her husband and fuck only Zeck because he had made her cum.

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by Harryin VA11/27/07

I dont get it

when everyone got out of the hot tub except for the wife and preacher WHY didnt SHE slide away ?

since that question is not answered... the rest of the story makes no sense.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

I Like It!

I don't give a damn if it's not the Shakespeare of our times, or if it's unreal. I want a story with a hot situation to jack off at it.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

great story

Sorry for all the bad comments. I thought people came here to read stories, not find every error in there stories. I guess the person that says people don't cheat on christmas eve, they must feel better about them self for only cheating all the other days but christmas time. LOL
Great story hope there is more to cum.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Crouch?

I have read and heard it called many things - but never before have I heard it called a CROUCH!!
Good story.

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by 11/27/07

good story but...

story was hot, and too bad if people didn't like the Christmas eve/preacher aspect. I have to admit though that the typos were a bit annoying only because they took my concentration off of the story. but i'm not bashing you ;) i did like it.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Good story

and what a bunch of assholes... If this kind of story bothers you "DON'T FUCKING READ IT"

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by Amyfriend11/27/07

Great story,

with some very hot scenes. It would make a great sequel when they get back to N.Y. and the Preacher visits. But I would suggest that you re-read a few times before submitting. Maybe even let a third party re-read to avoid minor glitches.

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by Bazzz11/27/07

Very hot story

I really liked reading this one. I am not sure if Non Consent is the right place for this one. Sure the black man was very forward but he was just taking what was ultimately given to him. Also you may want to proof read the story more thoroughly before posting it. While spell check takes care of the misspellings it won't correct a word that is spelled correctly but put in the story by mistake. You also mentioned that you were on fire too many times. Get a Thesaurus and use it to find words that are similar and often times much more descriptive. You did very well with this one great job. Please keep writing these kinds of interrcial soties

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by Anonymous11/27/07

good imagination

Got a real kick out of this yarn. Keep em coming. And to all the uptight, moralistic redneck preachers out there, get the fuck out of here and go read the bible rather than slamming the efforts of those who produce while all you do is criticize and spew your poisonous racism.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Zipless fuck, I think it's called

Really liked your story. my first wife loved being groped on crowded buses and elevators. Even lost her panties to a complete stranger that fingered her to near orgasm before she realized she missed her stop! Keep 'em coming.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Loved the Story

I absolutely LOVED the story and really hope there's a sequel back in NYC. She just has to take him inher husband's bed, and just has to beg him to take her over and over.

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by Ransom11/27/07

Really enjoyed the story

I look forward to more of this story. This was hot and definetely had me wanting to read more. Thank you.

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by Anonymous11/27/07

Okay

I think the scenario was dirty and hot, although I don't understand why the stranger had to be black (or brown, or red, or yellow for that matter). A stranger with a big cock and a nasty attitude would have been fine with me. Of course you had a lot of misspelled words so you may wish to find a proofreader, but otherwise, I enjoyed it.

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by Anonymous11/28/07

great

I would love to know if something more happens with this story. I love the excitement it brings. Smiling.
MsAnn

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by scotts248811/28/07

great story....only it kind of cooled off with the spelling errors near the end

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by woodnymph21411/28/07

liked it...

very hot story..i have to agree about getting a second person to read it though...if you would like you can email future stories to me and I will check them out for spelling before you turn them in....

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by seniorloving11/28/07

Outstanding

Loved the story. A different take on a well-worn topic

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by Anonymous11/28/07

Wish I was a woman!

I really empathized with this 20 something babe. She got such good sex from God's messenger, that I envied her being a woman. I guess I'd like to be a woman and be screwed so competently.


At this point we don't know if the pastor enjoyed giving, but receiving was certainly plenty holy in this situation. Oh, the pleasure of receiving great cock, and great animal style sex!

Having the hero of this story BLACK added a welcome taboo virtue. Author has a great future in this mileau.

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by Anonymous11/28/07

Braindead Nonsense But ---

Offensive because of the Oh Holy Whore of the season plus the need for a braindead wimp and the usual humongous black cock with bareback bastard baby possibility.

Doesn't anyone know how to avoid wimpy braindead husbands in an interracial story - they ruin any consideration other than absurd stroke.

With your talent plausibly used and a proofreader you could do much better writer.

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by budap0111/28/07

Excellent plot!

But i'm so bored with the hypocritical and racist comments that always accompany stories with this topic.

Some of you hate stories about older black men with younger white women. Still you read them. And find pleasure in venting your spleen over the writer. What bizarre masochism!

I really would love to read more about Susan and Zeck. I sense that their NY encounter will be even hotter than the one in the tub! Zeck simply is Susan's kind of man...

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by Anonymous11/28/07

Nice Concept

I would be interested in future chapters....and ignore the negatives, this is fiction if you enjoyed writing it, great........they do not need to read it

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by Anonymous11/28/07

Wrong Category; otherwise

It wasn't a NonConsent/Reluctance story. Once I realized it was not, I changed my mindset and did enjoy it. Proofread the story and place it in one of the more appropriate categories like Interracial Love, Erotic Couplings, Mature, Loving Wives, or Exhibitionist & Voyeur.

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by Anonymous11/28/07

crotch, not crouch

"swimming suite" "he didn't relies" "I just kept quite" "the leg whole of my bikini" "he had a better angel" "my young welling body" "My eyes pleased with him not to hurt me" "I rapped it and hid it" And for fuck's sake, you used semicolons, but don't know what commas are for? Wrong category, too. And the usual tired cliches. Other than those things, the story really sucked.

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by Anonymous11/28/07

Good but GEEZ!

The story actually worked for me. It was good but your spelling was so awful I found myself laughing. I hope you spelled that way only as a spoof on "Pornotica." If not it was really really bad. Otherwise a good story that kept me reading, cliches and all.

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by Anonymous11/29/07

Good story

I liked the story. Unlike some of the people here that keep cutting the author down...if you don't like it don't read it. All the "Anonymous" negative commenters think they can do better? Let's see it!

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by Anonymous11/30/07

I like the idea of this story. ~wink~ My comment just echoes what other people have already said about your spelling and a possible miscategorization... Other than that, the story could be considered Hot by some. Looking forward to your next (spell-checked!) story...

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by SlickTony12/02/07

Editor! Editor!

I really don't understand these people who diss a story because it happens to be in a category they don't like. I thought the black guy turning out to be a preacher was a nice twist--sometimes older black guys can exude a powerful sexual attraction. (I don't imagine old bluesmen go without if they don't want to.) But Lordy, Zipp! Get a copy editor. Everybody who's said that is saying no more than the truth. This story has more of the kind of errors that shouldn't appear in a finished product than a dog has fleas.

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by Anonymous12/03/07

Spell check...?

As many others have said, your spelling and grammar were absolutely terrible! With all of the technology these days, how do you not check something so important?

Other than that, the story wasn't terrible, but it was hindered greatly by all of the errors. I didn't hate it, but I can't respect it, either.

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by Anonymous12/04/07

Offensive

Offensive

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by Anonymous12/05/07

Who could not love the depth of this plot

"Nice guy" loses wife to well endowed Black preacher, with just the touch of his huge holiday giving penis,in front of his family and hers, and on the filthy floor of a public toilet, all on the eve of Christ's Birth. AND HE GAVE HER WHAT SHE SO WANTED, FOR CHRISTMAS. Look out Tolstoy.

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by Anonymous12/06/07

Despite...

...the numerous typos this is a very erotic story and I would love to see a sequel.

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by zipp212/07/07

Wow! what an outpouring of love.

First I want to thank everyone that left feedback for this story be it negative or positive. I am overwhelmed.

Thanks to all of you that left positive feedback, I know that a lot of you are like me and want to read this kind of story.

Thanks to all of you that left negative feedback, some of it was really helpful and helped me find errors. I have posted an edited story, its still not perfect, as none of my stories will be. It is better than it was and I want to thank everyone that helped me find the problems.

I guess many of you are still reading the comments on this story. I want you to know that none of the positive anonymous comments are from me.

Thanks to everyone … Merry Christmas!

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by Anonymous12/07/07

Still offensive

Isn't your deleting of all the negative comments the same result as if you made many positive comments?

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by Anonymous12/07/07

Still offensive

Isn't your deleting of all the negative comments the same result as if you made many positive comments?

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by zipp212/07/07

No.. not the same.

At the beginning of all my stories I post a disclaimer about the content. In this case Interracial sex, this type of sex is not offensive to some and these people find it very erotic. Like others have said many times below, if you don’t like this kind of story, then don’t read them. I do however find someone who posts twice very offensive. I will delete any comment that only addresses this point of the story. Also this is the last time I will address an anonymous comment.

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by Bazzz12/07/07

Well said Zipp

I couldn't agree more with your comment. Anyone who posts an anonymous comment forfeits his/her right to keep it from being deleted. I don't care what you've written as a comment. If you won't leave your name then forget about whining when it is deleted.

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by Anonymous12/09/07

So hot!

Offensive... offensive...

Why do all these hypocrites spend time reading stories they _know_ will "offend" them?

Their illiberal project is: stop people from writing stories that according to their own narrow standards are "offensive".

I _love_ stories about beautiful young white women who succumb to big old black men!

And I am looking forward to read about Zeck showing Susans husband how a woman should be treated!

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by Anonymous12/12/07

Loved it too

Never mind spelling mistakes or wrong category. Unimportant.
Important: a good plot and hot action.
Who are all these people whose hobby it is to witchhunt writers who write stories about old black men with young women?

Only US citizens can be so easily offended. Surely?

A sequel please!

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by Anonymous12/25/07

Sequel?

Needs a sequel.

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by Anonymous01/10/08

wow, what a story!

Never expect to read such an erotic story. At the beginning, I just scanned thru it roughly since it was in the catagory that I am not interested, but your writing is just exquisite, and I can sense your faith that the story is plausibly wtitten. So I go on, I felt so lucky to have given it a chance. Thank god that I did! I have to wait reading the sequel until the next day because I have already spent twice. I just need a break, lol.

Keep it going, man, you are one of the best, if not the best!

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by Anonymous09/02/11

perfect

Love to have the jets blasting on my asshole as I stroke off. Feels like hes pounding my ass.. Mmmmm feels so nice.

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by Anonymous05/15/14

Booo

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by Anonymous09/18/14

spelling

This is ruined by poor English and terrible spelling.

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by Tigersman04/27/15

Good story

This is definitely a good story. I liked the fact the wife discovered that the preacher was the man who gave her the best fucking of her life. You needed to mention if the wife was taking birth control or not, if she was fertile or if she was ovulating. A really good ending would have been the wife discovering she had been bred black.

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by Thrak11107/13/16

Great!

Love the intense hot tub scene. Very, very hot!

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by Anonymous03/26/17

The husband knew what was going on the whole time.

There is really not much you can do when a bigger, older black man starts putting the moves on your wife.

Bigger dick+more experience=white husband spectator.

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