To Late to Talk About It

Just Plain Sick

These are the true ravings of a madman -- poorly written and more than a little insane.

I felt dirty just reading it.

Yes, the author was trying to show that the husband went insane given the pressure of his situation. Still, this belongs on some other website for a different readership. Perhaps screwy holy rollers, sadists, wannabee psychiatrists.

Anyone but readers of erotica.

Consequences

This outcome is not that unusual. Although fire tends to be the weapon of choice to "purge" the demons. Sometimes people do get a bit upset by adultery.

of course a asshole like TheBullet would hate this

after all in theBullet/s real heart and mind all we know is filed with Hate. Has anyone noticed how after all all these numerous sequel to Nicci vile man hating 5year old temper tantrum story ...that an asshole like TheBullet... who should change his name to the DOUCHEBAG-- never reacted this strongly towards the ORIGINAL story ?

But when this guy clearly flips out because of the hate scorn and humilation from the wife... that doesnt seem to bother TheDOUCHEBAG.

Hey anonymous: gutless aren't you

You can call me disgusting names while hiding behind your anonymity. That takes a great deal of courage, anonymous. You must be very proud of yourself as you beat off to your virulence
Have you read any of my stories? Has there been violence in any of them? Any murders? Even my rape fantasy was non-violent.
And yet you claim that I am filled with hate. An interesting analysis.
I didn't condemn Nici's first story because I found it interesting and original. I thought the wife in it was a self-indulgent bitch and said so in my post. However, when written from that viewpoint, it really demonstrated how self-indulgent and disrespectful she had become.
Yes, in RealDoc's story, the husband is driven insane. I get it. Still, I don't like violence. Infidelity is not an executable offense in my universe (or in any state in the United States of America, with the possible exception of Texas).
I recognize what RealDoc was trying to do. I don't like how he did it. My family was affected by a murder-suicide. I still have to deal with the aftershocks years later.
So fuck you, anonymous and the horse you rode in on. And next time display a pair of balls by leaving a real member name.

why is jon played the stupid fool

why kill himself like a coward.this was as bad as nici story the other way.the story was rushed and read like a kid wrote it.punish the wife and lover,but not the kids by killing yourself.there other ways of punishment without killing them or yourself.to many holes in this story.

Too bad

I am a big fan of your more recent submittals but
am VERY disappointed with this tale. Nothing about
this story reflects your earlier maturing story-
telling abilities. I had really looked forward to your
next submittal and will consider this just a writer's
slump. I do want to thank you for the time and effort
you put into entertaining us with your tales.
Please keep submitting.

Spelling and grammar, please!

I'm sorry, I couldn't read it. This story needs an editor...

Hard ending

The ending of this story is pretty hard. But you could see were the story was going long before the end. I can understand this type of ending better than all of the wimps endings that Literotica is known for. Overall a good story. I'm always looking for stories written by RealDoc. Thank you for writing.

like the insanity,written like your insane,ty.but u misspelled {the}and it ruined it for me,come on people

A well done look at insanity and the triggers

This is too severe for me to call entertainment. I think it was written with effort and given a side that the writer wanted to portray as evil over good. I personally applaud this concept being given an exam as it is truly a call for understanding instead of calling it just a bunch of Bible thumpers. What does it mean to be insane or temporarily insane? Many people think it is a sham but I personally have seen people jump off into the deep-end over the pain of their life and loved ones being consumed. To each their own, but this was good to a degree of what someone might fantasizes as being pushed over the edge.Please continue to give us your storiesPT

could have been... but wasn't

Felt disjointed. Perhaps that is the way a man like him would think, but it would IMHO have read better if written smoother.

I don't know, Doc...

I don't know what to think about how you came up with this as an option for consequences to Nici's original story. It's pretty brutal and not very appetizing. I don't really buy it as a sequel to her story. The original "Jonathan" appeared to emotionally and mentally have 'both oars in the water' while the hallucinations and subsequent actions of your character would seem to be those of someone 'off center' for some time. For me the two "Jonathan's" shared the same name and nothing else. Also, I had difficulty believing that no one throughout your story picked up on the so obviously telegraphed intentions of your protagonist. That was more than my ability to suspend disbelief could muster.As to the mechanics of the story, your presentation just seemed awkward and unpolished. You really should consult one of the editors provided here in your future efforts. (eg. Your "To" in the title should be "Too.")Doc, you did provide an original alternative for the continuation of Nici's story. I commend you for that.

W.T.F.

Yikes, this was fun!

Plausible Ending

Can't say I "loved" this story, however, I think it is very credible that Jonathan would go nuts when presented with the set-up in the original NiCi story. Sad, tragic, violent - yes, but still a very credible outcome. As for Henry, I would say he deserved what he got - don't do the crime if you can't do the time.

Evoking Reasonably Unreasonable Emotions

A selfish lack of reason can cause an unreasonable response which the Author portrayed well here. Life and consequence isn't all paddy cake paddie cake is it.

Selfishly stirred emotions evoke non-predictable responses. See the comments between the 2 anonymous below [ the bullet and another anonymous ].

When dealing with the non-caring selfish emotions expressed by nicci there wasn't much of a rational ending possible by any other nor her - just a wandering through a myriad of possible what ifs that didn't make any more sense than the original story of cruel selfishness.

Make sense - of course not but then neither did the foundation. Isn't suicide the ultimate unreasonable selfishness?

Nice work Author. Reality doesn't need to be lifelike does it. More please.

not my cup of tea ut very understandable.

Afraid I would have stayed for my kids and let the two lovers live in paradise of Hell for eternity tho. Shoot them both in the genitals and leave after ripping out the phone.

Needs editorial help

Needs editorial help to clean up the typographical errors and syntactic blunders. As the storyline, it seems unlikely given the husband's character as portrayed in the original story but perhaps RealDoc envisioned him going insane, causing him to become homicidal. The violence of this conclusion leaves one cold, and the ending is unsatisfying.

The writing here is average, and the characters significantly depart from the original story. I make no judgment as the rightness or wrong of that departure but, as fiction, I expect the characters to act in ways that are consistent with their nature. That didn't happen in this telling.

At best, it deserves an average mark but the mediocre writing quality dragged the story down. I thank you for your effort.

More realistic than you might think

Come on folks give Doc a break. I thought it was a more realistic scenario than many of you indicated. I know because when my wife of 5 years cheated and left with her lover I went off the deep end and came with in a moment of doing what Jonathan did in this story. Only a flash of hesitation prevented me from pulling the trigger. I thought
Doc presented an interesting alternate ending to the story.

Hmmm

Sometimes if you beat a dog enough, he will go mad and seek to kill.

Boyd

Alternativ ending

to RealDoc's ending. Please delete the last three lines and insert/substitute:
Susan was horrified and screemed; "please Jonathan, don't shoot me, please!!!"
"Why not Susan, don't you want to meet me in paradise?" He replied.
"Yes, but not now. Please don't shoot, I love you, please put away the gun and we can be together again, please!"
"OK" Susan, you can wait. You can spend a few years waiting, and I will be in paradise for you when it is your turn", he said and put the barrel in his mouth and pulled the trigger.
When the paramedics arrived they found one quy without a cock, one man without a head and a babbeling woman saying "To late to talk, to late to talk." That was the only words she spoke for the remaing 50 years of her life in the institution she lived in until her 80th birthday.

thebullet,

I understand how a certain theme - certainly extreme violence is not a surprising example - could be a 'hot button'. I confess to resorting at times to feedbacks which upon later review seemed to me too harsh. But I still suggest that we try to avoid too harsh critic. I would suggest drawing the line in de legitmizing the very effort of the author, as far as being placed in Literotica. We have seen in more than few cases stories which ended with either suicide or murder- suicide. Surely, the quality of the writing is a matter which could be debated, but that is another matter.
On a personal note, I was very sorry and upset to read that such violence was inflicted on your family.

The final (and only) episode of a psychotic guy

Usually I am not a stickler for typos etc. but I have to admit that upon reading the story's title "To late to talk about it", I had a mini case of a ‘stomach rebellion’, Come again? Not “too late” but “to late”? I had to convince myself to get over my annoyance and open the link to the story.
I'll give the story that it was not formulaic. It read like a borderline psychotic narration (the guy actually had hallucinations). Whether it was meant to depict a real Psycho or a literary device to demonstrate the extreme emotional turmoil which a blatant betrayal can put into a somewhat fragile person - it was, how shall I put it -unusual!
I still feel that you went overboard with the thick hints, regarding the "plan", thus taking away any sense of surprise or development.
In addition, both husband and wife had pretty much one quality (different one to each of them...) that we could tell about from the story.
It was a quick sketch of one tact: the outcome of a betrayal: a crazed revenge. Got it. I believe you could have taken the same and upgrade it to a much more refined story.

one of the most meaningless continuations

I have ever glanced at. And that's all I did: glancing at it, scrolling down quickly. Why bother to pen some thing as meaningless, as bad, as idiotic, as incomprehensibly stupid as this?

It's not that things like this didn't happen. No, they do happen all the time. It's just the dialogues written here that is incredibly stupid. It's not just bad, or simply aggrevating, like, say the original author's train of thought, as storied. THIS continuation is sheer stupidity!

Far Out

Man this is some wild shit. I loved it. You really pushed the envelope on this one. Keep em coming.

Enjoyable and great ending!

We like this author's style!

Must admit it is better than Nicci's story.

A bit crazy but then some people are this crazy. After all why suicide. Kill her and him, do a little time in the psycho ward. Then go find a real woman.

When the first word of the title is mis-used...

my expectations go right to the floor -- and were fully met.

Too real to be ignored

I just found this one. Nice plot and good depiction of a man going crazy. This happens more than some of the commenters are willing to admit. Too bad Anonymous misspelled the word misused when he/she complained about the "mis-used" word "To" in the title.
Keep writing and thanks for the effort.
Kathi

Killing the two great, killing yourself stupid.

Trash needs to be thrown out and the two were trash. He is mentally ill, would serve a few years in a hospital and eventually released to raise his kids.

Why Kill Yourself?

Kinda crazy/sick story, I suppose madness causes suicide as well as homicide. Sure wasn't a happy ending, but much better than the original ending.

This was a great outcome to Nici's dog shit version.

Well done author!

another wimpy tale

Another portrait of a Jonathan cuckold, as a confused wimpy man, endlessly confused and unable to accept that his wife had whored herself out for over a year, behind his back, and was doing her best , now, to figuratively cut his balls off. The man portrayed here does not have a backbone of any consequence. Still simpering and telling this worthless whore that he still loved her very late into this story. He is obviously someone who has a very low IQ and little ability to cut through the crap, with any level of true understanding or decisive decision making ability, as he is led by far more intelligent people. The fact that he has let his whore wife cuckold him for such a long time, perhaps as another filthy prostitute for her lover, without any real realization of how he was being used, says it all. Dumb and dumber!

if this, then...

let her see henry shot fatally first and die, and she knows its her date to follow...and make sure to have a solid alibi and get rid of the weapn. She is insured I trust.

The only one that needed to die was the lover.

A simple walk into the woods with a gun and shovel would have worked out better. Her lover's disappearance would have left Susan with doubt and fear but no real knowledge. Johnathan would enjoy the fruits of his labor and revenge without risk of punishment. The bastard would have been a missing person no one would have missed.

i would not give this anything

The husband kills the wife, himself. the lover is still alive and dickless. the kids he love so much are alone after the death of both parents. and he believes they are going to heaven. enough said.

I LOVED IT!!!!!!!

A great story and a perfect ending!

a fitting end for the two adulterers

but suicide over a slut wife, get real

WHAT A WAY TO GO OUT

but what a payback. TK U MLJ LV NV

Finally a real life story

JPB and other writers take note and learn!

A Little Severe

But the point is taken. The point being and I quote " If you cheat it's the end of the world." That's my quote.

Well OK

That is definitely a different angle LOL

Again not necessarily the most reasonable - but hey it worked for him -

Sorta screws up the kids which would have been my priority all along -

#2 WELL...THAT IS ONE WAY TO PUT AN END TO ALL THE BS

if one could ask them both, were you satisfied now, TK U MLJ LV NV

rough

rough ending he should have started a fire and pissed off to south america and got laid

what?

the only one to live is the lover? not

Spooky Story***

It grossed me out. Sorry!

One of the most realistic stories here!

Read the paper, this happens every day! A guy catches his wife screwing around and people die!

Terribly written

I like most of RealDoc's stories, but this one was just awful.

well

she drove her husband insane, and she paid the cost.

better she just murdered him and took up a lover. Less pain for him that way. And she didnt love him anyway, as her actions proved. Sadly, also demonstrated she didnt love her children either.

Have Always Wondered

Plausible scenario. Have always wondered about some of the possibilities over the cheating bitch wife who treats her husband and family in such a manner. All of the cuck stories never have a possible ending where the husband snaps. I mean truly snaps. Even wimps go off the road. Some commit suicide, some maim, others murder. When you take a weak but hetero male and subject him to the lifestyle as it's described where is the breaking point? Is there one? I would bet more finally break than live a lifetime as a chuck. Coercion, forced or I'm just giving you your fantasy does not make for a long happy life for anyone. A lot of stories are only snippets in time. What are the long tern consequences? Just rambling thoughts. Thanks for the story.

while it is a conclusion to the prequil

it is not a satisfactory resolution to the problem.