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Sorry wrong catagory
Can you spell RAPE because that's what this was, not an erotic coupling, if she doesn't have the knowlege to consent.
Very erotic revenge but is still as said rape.
YOu should have tried the forced/nonconsent category for the story. But otherwise I like the aspect of revenge on the drunken lout of a husband she has. Not sure raping and using her is an quid pro quo but if she knew it was you and did not report it she accepted the act perhaps. Drunken women are used in all types of scenes not the least at high school and college parties and normally never have an opportunity to know who actually impregnated them. Some things never change and although it isnt fair no one needs to drink enough to not know who bedded them.
Might be wrong category but good story!
However, things have a tendency to come back around! LOL
Needs work...
Extracting revenge against the one who wronged you I can understand. In this story the wife had nothing to do with the jokes being said against the narrator. Furthermore, the narrator never even made the case for taking action against his ‘friend’. The narrator says of the last joke said by his friend: “My first instinct was to literally knock him upside the head with a sofa cushion, but then I got a much better idea.”
Does the author equate the light annoyance experienced above with rape as an appropriate response? It appears so. The idea of raping his ‘friend’s’ wife is so over the top that no manner of justification can suffice. This story would have gotten a better response from me if it had been posted in the Non-Consent Category.
As for the erotic quality of the narrative in the scene with his friend’s wife, that has some merit. However, the writing up to that point needs work. For one, the paragraphs are twice the size they needed to be. Making them shorter helps the readability of the piece. There were also some grammatical errors that were distracting too. For a story so short, these mistakes are especially hard to overlook.
Rape
So did she get knocked up from your rape of her?
What revenge, oh the one where she blows your
head off for rape that causes her to be pregnant! Or perhaps when the police come to your home and arrest you for rape. There was no act that causes a man to rape a woman unconnected with jokes in this story. Sorry this is just to immature and childish. He cheated on his wife and marriage and raped a woman, wow what a man, NOT.
Bigger tummy?
You need to add a chapter or two on this one, showing that her tummy seems to be getting bigger....without her realizine who the true daddy is.
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