The nightclub scene was very well done. The dialogue was realistic and flowed naturally. It will be interesting to see how well David does with the rest of his list.
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Anonymous12/09/07
Damn Good
Damn, that was a good one. This is the way a story should be written... something that's lacking by most entries here on the Lit.
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Anonymous12/09/07
Very well done. Kudos!
Very well written, and a very enviable experience. I tip my hat to you, sir.
English
Credible
Credible erotica,I must just be talking from experience,my sister and I ???????
Really Good
The nightclub scene was very well done. The dialogue was realistic and flowed naturally. It will be interesting to see how well David does with the rest of his list.
Damn Good
Damn, that was a good one. This is the way a story should be written... something that's lacking by most entries here on the Lit.
Very well done. Kudos!
Very well written, and a very enviable experience. I tip my hat to you, sir.
Lenslord
Great Story
Loved the story. Reminded me of my sister!!
Good Tale
This was so good it deserves at least another chapter.
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