About a year ago, I wrote a story called THE ROMANCE OF A FAT GIRL which you did me the kindness of reviewing - and invited me to check out your writing. Unfortunately, I seldom write erotica - most of my writing is fantasy - and it's been a long, long time since I last visited this site (I was busy writing a couple of novels and stuff).
This story is good. I did not give it a 100% rating for one reason only - you already said your narrator's lover is a BBW. You don't have to keep rubbing it in (meaty thighs, finger sized nipples and so on). It makes it sound as though you're writing for a fetishist who can't get excited without having the lady's physique constantly before his eyes.
About a year ago, I wrote a story called THE ROMANCE OF A FAT GIRL which you did me the kindness of reviewing - and invited me to check out your writing. Unfortunately, I seldom write erotica - most of my writing is fantasy - and it's been a long, long time since I last visited this site (I was busy writing a couple of novels and stuff).
This story is good. I did not give it a 100% rating for one reason only - you already said your narrator's lover is a BBW. You don't have to keep rubbing it in (meaty thighs, finger sized nipples and so on). It makes it sound as though you're writing for a fetishist who can't get excited without having the lady's physique constantly before his eyes.
Very nice story, good and romantic. You could feel the girl's emotions, even though it was told from the point of view of the guy. That takes some skill. Going to check your other stories.
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GREAT STORY
Great story! Very exciting
I should have checked your writing before
About a year ago, I wrote a story called THE ROMANCE OF A FAT GIRL which you did me the kindness of reviewing - and invited me to check out your writing. Unfortunately, I seldom write erotica - most of my writing is fantasy - and it's been a long, long time since I last visited this site (I was busy writing a couple of novels and stuff).
This story is good. I did not give it a 100% rating for one reason only - you already said your narrator's lover is a BBW. You don't have to keep rubbing it in (meaty thighs, finger sized nipples and so on). It makes it sound as though you're writing for a fetishist who can't get excited without having the lady's physique constantly before his eyes.
I shall be checking your other stories....
Bill
I should have checked your writing before
About a year ago, I wrote a story called THE ROMANCE OF A FAT GIRL which you did me the kindness of reviewing - and invited me to check out your writing. Unfortunately, I seldom write erotica - most of my writing is fantasy - and it's been a long, long time since I last visited this site (I was busy writing a couple of novels and stuff).
This story is good. I did not give it a 100% rating for one reason only - you already said your narrator's lover is a BBW. You don't have to keep rubbing it in (meaty thighs, finger sized nipples and so on). It makes it sound as though you're writing for a fetishist who can't get excited without having the lady's physique constantly before his eyes.
I shall be checking your other stories....
Bill
Very romantic
Very nice story, good and romantic. You could feel the girl's emotions, even though it was told from the point of view of the guy. That takes some skill. Going to check your other stories.
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