Good writing, your fantsey, you don't mention the husband or their sex life in story but she has done this sort of thing before, so are they swingers, open marriage or is she just a slut?
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Anonymous12/07/07
and the child ??
Ok so she goes off and has one with Santa, where was the kid all this time .. "handed off to another mom" just does not cut it.
It would have been nice if Santa turned out to be her husband & kid's father, maybe separated but now back together. So maybe that is how he " knew her name", and she saw nothing and wouldn't recognize even though mere inches away.
How is it that there is always someone who takes every word as gospel truth? I read it as a story, I enjoyed it, and I just managed to grab a tissue in time as the story finished. Can I come down your chimney on Christmas Eve?
For a first effort, this was very good. First of all, it was well written, no typos that I noticed, good use of grammar and punctuation. All the "little" things that make a story so much more readable. Secondly, the author leaves the true identity of Santa up in the air, open to each reader's interpretation. I like it that way, because the reader can decide if it was her husband, or perhaps a neighbor, clerk from her local grocery store, whatever.
I would agree that the "handing off" of the daughter was probably the weakest element in the story. Perhaps it might have worked better if she had taken the daughter home or to a play date, then returned to the mall to finish up her shopping. But in any event, the author does set it up so that the daughter is being looked after at the time the naughtiness with Santa takes place.
Some people troll this site for one reason only - to place sanctimonious comments and give 00 ratings to stories that they avidly search out and read (probably multiple times) involving anything that they find sinful. But what the hey -- hopefully it keeps them off the streets and away from their weekly Planned Parenthood protests, harrassing scared teenagers.
Hey, those guys get paid peanuts. I admire a mother who's not afraid to tip a jolly fellow. Let's face it we've all seen pictures of Mrs. Claus...I wouldn't go there.
Liked the story very much.
I really enjoyed this! It's well written, fun, and sensuous too! Keep up the wonderful work!
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Anonymous12/08/07
This story done several times each XMAS season
This one about average--Suggest lynna try something that he dreams up himself
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Anonymous12/08/07
Nicely done
Hot story, well written, and your choice of category was an added bonus. The description of the atmosphere at the beginning and the main character's harried attitude rang true. Keep up the good work.
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12/08/07
Naughty
A very hot story. Just love the little fetishes people have around Christmas time.
Santa can come down my chimney this year. Loved the story, sounds so true. It made me very wet, but as I'm neglected, that's usual.
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Anonymous12/08/07
How amazing
That people get so caught up in a story, they have to bash every little detail about it that doesn't "ring true". Its a story, its erotica. The whole point is to make you excited, right? Your picking it apart because she didn't have her little girl anymore, even though she obviously had someone watching her. Your picking it apart because there is no mention of a husband, or the fact that she had sex with a stranger. Wow. If that was a man in the story instead of a woman, he'd be given a high five and called a stud. But because its a woman, she's a slut because she enjoyed herself. Your right. Maybe it should have been a nonconsent story; then, it would have been ok that she got off, as long as she had a guilty conscious after it happened BECAUSE she got off. Maybe this author should completely rewrite the story the way that you think it should be, so that you can be happy. Oh, wait, but then it wouldn't be her story anymore.
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Anonymous12/08/07
W.T.F.
W.T.F.I gave it a 75. My bad about husband as she is unwed mother.Happened at frat party, can't remember his name or what he looked like but he had a cool tatoo.Did it in the bathroom,hot but people kept beating on door.Had to drop out of collage,but going back one day.When she gets pregenent this time she can call it Noel.Merry Christmas!
English
W.T.F.
Good writing, your fantsey, you don't mention the husband or their sex life in story but she has done this sort of thing before, so are they swingers, open marriage or is she just a slut?
and the child ??
Ok so she goes off and has one with Santa, where was the kid all this time .. "handed off to another mom" just does not cut it.
It would have been nice if Santa turned out to be her husband & kid's father, maybe separated but now back together. So maybe that is how he " knew her name", and she saw nothing and wouldn't recognize even though mere inches away.
Yours,
Kilroy
It was only a story!
How is it that there is always someone who takes every word as gospel truth? I read it as a story, I enjoyed it, and I just managed to grab a tissue in time as the story finished. Can I come down your chimney on Christmas Eve?
Am excellent first effort
O particularly liked your description of his voice and the way it affected Lauren. Keep 'em coming, please.
very good
I was a bit concerned about the kid.
Other than that, excellent story!
W.T.F. is one busy sanctimonious bleeeep!
For a first effort, this was very good. First of all, it was well written, no typos that I noticed, good use of grammar and punctuation. All the "little" things that make a story so much more readable. Secondly, the author leaves the true identity of Santa up in the air, open to each reader's interpretation. I like it that way, because the reader can decide if it was her husband, or perhaps a neighbor, clerk from her local grocery store, whatever.
I would agree that the "handing off" of the daughter was probably the weakest element in the story. Perhaps it might have worked better if she had taken the daughter home or to a play date, then returned to the mall to finish up her shopping. But in any event, the author does set it up so that the daughter is being looked after at the time the naughtiness with Santa takes place.
Some people troll this site for one reason only - to place sanctimonious comments and give 00 ratings to stories that they avidly search out and read (probably multiple times) involving anything that they find sinful. But what the hey -- hopefully it keeps them off the streets and away from their weekly Planned Parenthood protests, harrassing scared teenagers.
Here Cums Santa Claus
Hey, those guys get paid peanuts. I admire a mother who's not afraid to tip a jolly fellow. Let's face it we've all seen pictures of Mrs. Claus...I wouldn't go there.
Liked the story very much.
Great work!
I really enjoyed this! It's well written, fun, and sensuous too! Keep up the wonderful work!
This story done several times each XMAS season
This one about average--Suggest lynna try something that he dreams up himself
Nicely done
Hot story, well written, and your choice of category was an added bonus. The description of the atmosphere at the beginning and the main character's harried attitude rang true. Keep up the good work.
Naughty
A very hot story. Just love the little fetishes people have around Christmas time.
chimney
Santa can come down my chimney this year. Loved the story, sounds so true. It made me very wet, but as I'm neglected, that's usual.
How amazing
That people get so caught up in a story, they have to bash every little detail about it that doesn't "ring true". Its a story, its erotica. The whole point is to make you excited, right? Your picking it apart because she didn't have her little girl anymore, even though she obviously had someone watching her. Your picking it apart because there is no mention of a husband, or the fact that she had sex with a stranger. Wow. If that was a man in the story instead of a woman, he'd be given a high five and called a stud. But because its a woman, she's a slut because she enjoyed herself. Your right. Maybe it should have been a nonconsent story; then, it would have been ok that she got off, as long as she had a guilty conscious after it happened BECAUSE she got off. Maybe this author should completely rewrite the story the way that you think it should be, so that you can be happy. Oh, wait, but then it wouldn't be her story anymore.
W.T.F.
W.T.F.I gave it a 75. My bad about husband as she is unwed mother.Happened at frat party, can't remember his name or what he looked like but he had a cool tatoo.Did it in the bathroom,hot but people kept beating on door.Had to drop out of collage,but going back one day.When she gets pregenent this time she can call it Noel.Merry Christmas!
this was fun!
I really liked it. I hope that Lauren will get permanently lucky (hint, hint).
Nice job!
I liked that he knew Lauren's name, but we never figured out who he was..Suspenseful!
Loved the erotic detail
Well written and very naughty. Just like I like it.
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