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Fantastic — there's hidden strength in her and attitude. Don't count her down or out.
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it looks and feels like three different poems, i.e. the person speaking is different in the first stanza, and it progrssively becomes more rhymed, these are not bad things, I just feel it could be a little more integrated.
Strength
Perhaps the first strophe repeats the words of the partner who is the oppressor - this is my reading of the poem. I see the woman convincing herself she is breaking free of his 'vibe'. A fascinating way to represent this situation. Perhaps a change in line breaks would shift the focus from the sudden rhyme at the end.
Very deep and enjoyable
I loved the transitions this poem had from the beginning to the end it told a story of self discovery and strength. I truly enjoyed your work, it was very well written and I look forward to reading some of your others.
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