Please don't write anymore! You and Sammuel X belong in a jail cell together so you can work out your hatred against women! How juvenile to take pictures with your phone! What an ass!
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Anonymous12/15/07
Nice story, very erotic...
how bout a sequal?!!
by
Anonymous12/15/07
haters
dont listen to any of them... they dont understand the idea that a fantasy doesn't make them true... get over yourselves
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Anonymous12/15/07
umm...
I'm not all that into the rape stuff myself, but I can't understand those guys bitching at you for it when there's THOUSANDS of rape stories on lit. you're a good writer. if this is the stuff that floats your boat, keep on writing it.
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Anonymous12/15/07
Fantasy
and imagined reality are different. This writer has a problem. His scenario is based on violating someone who is out of it and constantly refers to her as a "fucking slut". He really has a deep seated problem if this is how he imagines that the majority of people behave or contemplate behaving. I enjoy good erotica and try not to get confused between an imagined scenario and reality but there have to be parameters that define acceptability. This is not about being up my own arse but about how we regard and show respect for other people. Good writers can make a case of non-consent/reluctance erotic and acceptable. This author has failed miserably.
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Anonymous12/18/07
More
Please write more like this. Kellypam18
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Anonymous07/15/09
need more
it need more write more what happen did u fuck her again
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Anonymous10/12/09
Fucking amateur!
You are so boring i nearly passed out when i was reading this! Do yourself a favour don't write again. The whole rape concept was juvenile and poorly executed. YUK
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Anonymous02/27/10
good idea, bad execution
it was a hot idea, but you aren't very good at writing yet. this is pretty sad. try writting short stories you can show friends and family for practice and critiques.
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Anonymous03/28/12
Just shut up
Really though if the writer wants to do this just let them do it and really at least the writer has the guts to put it on this website so don't judge because personally i thought it was a really good story.
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Anonymous08/13/14
no brains
if you had any brains ( and posting this shit proves you don't ) you ould either put this shit in the nonconsent area or WARN THE READERS IN THE SUBTITLE OR AN INTRO THAT YOU PUT RAPE IN THE STORY.
English
RAPE
RAPE = JAIL = This is RAPE
Crap!
Please don't write anymore! You and Sammuel X belong in a jail cell together so you can work out your hatred against women! How juvenile to take pictures with your phone! What an ass!
Nice story, very erotic...
how bout a sequal?!!
haters
dont listen to any of them... they dont understand the idea that a fantasy doesn't make them true... get over yourselves
umm...
I'm not all that into the rape stuff myself, but I can't understand those guys bitching at you for it when there's THOUSANDS of rape stories on lit. you're a good writer. if this is the stuff that floats your boat, keep on writing it.
Fantasy
and imagined reality are different. This writer has a problem. His scenario is based on violating someone who is out of it and constantly refers to her as a "fucking slut". He really has a deep seated problem if this is how he imagines that the majority of people behave or contemplate behaving. I enjoy good erotica and try not to get confused between an imagined scenario and reality but there have to be parameters that define acceptability. This is not about being up my own arse but about how we regard and show respect for other people. Good writers can make a case of non-consent/reluctance erotic and acceptable. This author has failed miserably.
More
Please write more like this. Kellypam18
need more
it need more write more what happen did u fuck her again
Fucking amateur!
You are so boring i nearly passed out when i was reading this! Do yourself a favour don't write again. The whole rape concept was juvenile and poorly executed. YUK
good idea, bad execution
it was a hot idea, but you aren't very good at writing yet. this is pretty sad. try writting short stories you can show friends and family for practice and critiques.
Just shut up
Really though if the writer wants to do this just let them do it and really at least the writer has the guts to put it on this website so don't judge because personally i thought it was a really good story.
no brains
if you had any brains ( and posting this shit proves you don't ) you ould either put this shit in the nonconsent area or WARN THE READERS IN THE SUBTITLE OR AN INTRO THAT YOU PUT RAPE IN THE STORY.
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