All Comments on 'Shelby and Johnny Ch. 02'

You need to remove the far too often use of long single word sentences like aaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh, oooohhhhhhhh, etc as the only word for a complete sentence/paragraph just rotten grammer and insults the reader.

Way too many "paragraphs," and the general writing was very bad. An editor might have salvaged this story.

this story is pretty good.... very meaning-ful.. that it's just something..... i really liked it.. keep up with the good work and hope to hear what's next in the story.... holla @ ya later take care.... -n-

For fuck's sake. How stupid can young people be? No condom? No pill? Gonna marry her if she gets pregnant? LOL, I hope real people today aren't this stupid/naive.