All Comments on 'My First Time Out of the House'

got me horny

pleeeeeeeeeeeezzz write more soon

I see this is your first attempt at a CD story.

You need to edit your work before you post it.

There are plenty of faux pas.

When you read your work, do it slower.

Do not just scan over it, read each word.

Correct those mistakes as you find them.

Some people say screw proofreading, it's a damn wank off story.

But lots of mistakes detract from a story.

I have actually stopped reading a few stories due to outrageously bad grammar.

Be proud of your work !

Do it correctly.

I have done some editing for a couple of writers here on Litorotica .

Believe me , it makes a difference .