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by ElmerGlew12/13/07

Nice, though a little vague.

Suggestions: Change "I am tumbling" to "I tumble" (passive to active verb). I find "ocean of confusion" a touch cliche. Maybe change to something like "the disorienting sea". That's my personal taste, of course. Yours may be different.

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by LeBroz12/13/07

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Creates quite a sense of flailing and the hope that at some time yet to come, life may come to be ordered and sane.

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by twelveoone12/16/07

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Mista-fied, I'm intrigued.

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