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Nice — non-judgmental of another person's pain.
Real
I've been there... But, I fell in love. Took me two and a half years to get away from both. Could have been longer.
Not that I've read the oeuvre...
...but from what I can tell, your narrative poetry works best (Heroin Boy, Joe "Lick My Balls" Garett). In these works your ability to tell a story garners you admission to The Torn Nylon, that poetry dive at the end of the block. Something like "4:34 a.m.," not so much. In your non-narrative poems you don't use the vocabulary or turns of phrases that could "pull 'em off" (so to speak). Now, you could indeed work and work and work on your non-narrative verse and eventually it would get to the same wonderful level as your narrative scribblings, but why bother? Your narrative work is pretty damned good as is and it evokes (in my mind at least) the wonderful writing of the late great Cookie Mueller. I say go with your strengths, grrl. Best regards, -maximo
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