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very good, stopped a little early
i think this story has started well. A little short though. I would have liked to have read more. Some mistakes in grammar and spelling, but well enough written to overlook them. Maybe ask someone to proof read before posting if you can? I would have marked it 85 if the option was there. Well done. Keep writing.
Excellent beginning..
you should most definitely write more to this what happens next?great so far but you must keep it going..
PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please Please FINISH IT!!!!!!!
I absolutely love it and i really hope u come back and finish it!!!!!!! First time i got wet so easily and then it ended =[
Please!
Cinta!
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