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Girl's Night Out Ch. 01

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by walkingeagle12/29/07

Good start!

Great start! I'm off for more--

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by Anonymous01/07/08

good start...

I hope you don't mind some constructive criticism, but you should focus more on content and less on details. I like the story and your descriptive writing, however, I see no importance in knowing what each person drinks, or what each person's occupation is. If these are relevant to a plot twist later on, then by all means keep them in. However, if it is just for character development, it distracts the readed from the meat of the story.

Keep at it. As I mentioned, I do like the story

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