A New Beginning Ch. 01

Window

Thanks:
More than a window that lets us only look into other's lives.
You do it very well!
High Regards: Bill

Very Well Done

Well written, interesting and entertaining. What more can one ask?

Very Good

Can't wait for the next chapter. This story just reinforced why you are one of my favorite authors.

Merry Christmas to us!

We thank the Celt for a lovely Christmas Present.
Nice start, though I admit that my only doubt about the Nicole case shortly after their first date was if Rick had set it up for her to take money from the hero...
I still feel a bit sad about poor Jennie, maybe they will get back together again in the future. (Yes the chapter is in the post line, can you change it) Anyway you made my day!

Good start

It's an excellent start, but I can see more trouble ahead for our hero. I'm also more than a little suspicious of Rick. When big money is involved it seems like everybody has a hidden agenda. I look forward to the conclusion and thank you for sharing your talent with us.

learned his lesson, did he?

It looks like thecelt has learned to avoid the Loving Wives section. Those romance readers are a lot less critical, though this reads like a standard loving wives story.

To me it's a pretty depressing story; just the kind of thing, in fact that I wanted to read on Christmas morning.

Thanks a heck of a lot.

Heck, I'm just grumpy cause I didn't get what I wanted for xmas. Don't pay any attention to me.

WHY alex is a LOSER

Great story but I have to wonder if Alex can see WHY he is such a LOSER. First with his wife.

Jennie says she went out 1 time to pick up a man with her girlfriend Sherry. One time and she got pregnant. Sure that COULD happen... but given everything else her story is Bullshit.

Jennie who lied and lied and lied for months (lie by omission) has done it again. She was fucking LOTS of other men on those Girls night out with Sherry.

Folks Her story makes NO sense. A woman who claims to deeply in love with her husband.... who is Desperate for a child... revolted by artitifcal means... decides that its time to go pick up a Guy at a bar and fuck and that 1 time she happened she got pregnant? Please the next thing you know ALEX will believe in all those WMDs in Iraq. The Choices and natire she made all those weeks to lie amkes her story unbelieverable.

If Alex goes back to Jennie I wonder he ever asks that question. I doubt it.

With Nicole... Alex sees her for several Months. She wont take him to met her family friends or see her place. There is an old Joke from Chris Rock... ladies if your Guy says you cant call him at work or at Home or ONLY on a special cell phone... you are NOT his girlfriend..."

Same thing. Yet Alex takes SEVERAL months to figure out something is wrong. Waaay too long.

Thanks again Celt!

Very nice story and Christmas present for your faithful readers!

Ho! ho! ho! (pun intended)

Who knows what lurks in the fingers of Literotican editors? This wouldn't be the first time that they screwed up a story's category.

Poor Alex does seem to have his problems finding a suitable mate. Looking forward to chapter two.

What a total loser

for a "hero"! This guy is EXACTLY like those women who go from one loser, abusive husband, to another, without failing!

we can make some good predictions here, with the Celt:

the loser is going to end up with Jennie again, with her saying, with an all-knowing smile: I knew you was gonna come back to us. the baby is not yours; but it is yours! look at her! isn't she beautiful, LIKE YOU? Hahaha!"

and he'd say, "Please, Jennie, take me back! I can't live without you!"

and she'd say, "Sure, but you have to share me now, you hear? I can sleep with whomever I want, and I want more children!"

and he'd cry BIG TEARS and say, "Yes, Jennie, so long as you love me and stay with me!" and then he'd go on tell Jennie about Nicole, the professional hooker, who also, like Jennie before, telling him tearful stories about having to satisfy Ramon, Jamal and all the men in the world until she could live her life,,,,

pathetic "hero" you are writing, the Celt...

Proof!

Many women are not trustworthy. Some guys are trusting and get burned. Some people don't learn the first time. Not everyone is a die hard cynic at 20, it normally takes another 20 years or so to get the experience required to be a cynic. This is a believable story and very possible. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

why is it that

every time --- in these stories --- the wife gets pregnant, by another man ("Honey, I love you so much, so much more than my life, and so I thought I should just pick a stranger to have him dump some semen in my vagina, so I could conceive a child for us, since you can't do it"), the husband doesn't ask one of the most obvious questions, which is?

"Oh, 'honey,' so if the roles were reversed --- let's say you couldn't conceive --- and I just paid a woman to have sex with me, once or twice, or however many times it takes, until she becomes pregnant, and I THEN report to you, something like,,, "Errr, honey, we are going to have a child, and here's the woman who is carrying yours and my baby. Don't worry, honey, I had sex with her only a couple times,,, just to make sure she's pregnant with our baby, and THEN I stopped having sex with her,,, I thought if you did not know, until I brought the baby from the hospital, that it would be okay; that you would just think it is yours and mine,,, and we would be a true family, with a real baby both you and I could call it 'ours'...."...........

Why is it that in these stupid stories, every time the wife fucks around, gets pregnant, or give the husband the clap, he GOES OUT TO DRINK SENSELESS and then just start looking for the closest motel? I mean, WTF do these characters have for brains... or more accurately, what do their "creators" have for a brain, to come up with such gibberish nonsense, almost every time?

Not so bad....

Thecelt is showing it: "Life isn't that easy for a greenhorn." So let's wait and see what'll happen... Good Luck TC!!!! - Bavarian

You got me hooked

Thanx for the wonderful read. Can't wait for the next chapter. LYG

well developed story to this point

This is an interesting story about a man who holds to his own set of standards. He would not accept his ex wife's actions and, now, will not accept his girlfriend's being a high price call girl. I my mind the two are cases Celt presents are different. I would have accepted the girlfriend while I would not have done so for the ex wife. My acceptance of Nichole would take into consideration the fact that she was already a call girl when he met her. She was in the process of paying off her credit cards, loans, etc. What I would have done would have been to sat her down and together make a plan in which Nichole could become debt free and, then, the two could continue with their relationship.

It seems that this story (like many of Celt's other
works) can go several ways at this point. I assume that he will now meet a third women who will be a perfect fit for him. I think the The Celt sets standards for excellence in his stories. RAG

Life is full of less than perfect people genghis &

they are necessary for a more than milk-toast type story, however it takes talent to cause emotions and write credibly.

You - Author - write to life in a way that resonates with a likeliness of reality. It certainly helps that what you do is quite entertaining along the way.

Author - you are appreciated and much is hoped for from you.

With Very High Regard

comments

I would like to get to vote on some of the comments as well, pretty entertaining

Bullshit

Your characters are not only weak they are also stupid. It's a shame that you waste your significant talent writing trash.

ASSHOLES!!! GREAT STORY

WTF! Stop being such a prick, i bet you can never write something as good as that. Don't listen to all those haters! you're story was wonderful can wait for MORE!!!

Slowly look at the story.

He marries a girl who wants to have babies, he can make babies but it is slow and not really a sure thing. She starts going out, was it twice weekly with a slutty girlfriend to relax. Suddenly she is pregnant. The DNA test proves it is not his. She says she went out once after DECIDING to fuck a guy to get pregnant, chose someone she did not know and fucked him once and was pregnant. If her adultry and cheating only took once to get pregnant what were all of the other nights out for, practice? The she has the balls to say she only loved her husband and wanted him to get over it and take the baby as his, even names the baby junior. It takes real love for a woman to totally betray her husband, go out and have at risk sex with a stranger, get pregnant with a bastard, fend the bastard off as her husbands child, and still claim to love her husband. Yeah right! If it walks like a duck, quacks like a duck, looks like a duck, and swims like a duck, guess what it is a duck! She is an outright lying cheating slut, nothing more, nothing less. That his father would maintain contact with her even tho the child is not related to him may indicate and even more sinister scheme. Do you think his father is the father of the bastard? You know taking care of the family problems? If so let the father marry the slut and get on with your life. In the second case. That girl is owned and from the sound of it is a drug user well into her life as a prostitute, call girl. Yes did you get your various STD and AIDS test done and will you be a good boy and keep getting them for the next year? In reality marrying her would be better than going back to Jeannie, after all you know her past before you marry her, and if you can get her to change her life you have one very sexually experienced toy to play with. In reality, neither is a good choice for a wife. Both have way to much baggage to bring into a marriage. The real problem is they have fucked up the brain of the one in the story with some morals, ethics, and character. Celt find him a good wife not an old or a new slut.

"Once bitten twice shy"....

His wife Jennie lost respect for her husband and replaced it with contempt. All Jennie had to back her claim of a one night stand are her words. Words against action prove meaningless. She in fact had to develop an attraction to her cuckolding paramour before considering bedding him so the notion that the sex was meaningless doesn't hold water, else any swinging dick would do...the uglier the better as long as her satisfaction was achieved and anonymity was maintained. It seems strange that Rick not only was the initial one to notice Nichole, but it was at his urging that Alex pursue her in the first place. It also seems very unlikely that she would appear at one of Alex's watering holes, shoot down all the other guys patronizing the bar for private company, and have her head turned around by Alex's admittedly weak come-on line. Nichole appears to be setting up a scam in collusion with Rick who is one of her current clients. As a subtle condition to marriage she'd propose that he fork over a huge chunk of his inheritance to her unseen manager, Rick(his commission to gain access), to free herself of debt. Once married Nichole could continue the fraud by gaining access to his inheritance account with the help of Rick and siphon its funds away over a course of time. Once the funds were depleted then she would gut and leave him penniless and steeped in debt after the divorce. Alex should take extreme care with whom he associates himself with in the future. "Once bitten twice shy"..."Twice bitten the dog dies"!

Very telling moment about their personalities

Specifically his and Jennie's.

She tells him "I will raise him as I said and you have nothing to say about that." but then names the baby after him, yet he does nothing. everything she has done has been unilateral, he decisions and hers alone. She has taken away his right to name any child he may later have after himself. And his reaction on this? Nothing. Despite his walking away from the marriage and her, he still let her dictate the terms and the relationship.

Good Loving Wives Story

It is the self-centered who only see what they want and that is good for everyone according to their own thought process. The people who think like this can never give love, as they don’t have any to give, they keep it for themselves and only give what satisfies themselves. She likes her husband for the traits she sees and has had control till the truth came out. As her personality is now formed she needs what it is that pleases her more then giving up any needs.The hooker is even more a user as she comes across as a submissive type person who needs to give what she thinks the other person wants. She will find what she thinks is love to get someone to tell her she is special. Her whole life could be just one affair after another being used like she uses others.Great start of a loving wives story. Wonderfully written and thank you for all your efforts.PT

Agree with Anonymous in The Real World

I know my father, for whom I am named after, would never have let an ex-wife name her bastard child after him, thus denying my father the future opportunity to name me (his biological son) after him.

He would have at the minimum gone to court to stop it from happening and he definitely would have verbally stood up for himself when she told him she was going to name her bastard child after him.

Of course my father has a backbone, unlike the Alex character.

I enjoyed the set-up of this story; and am looking forward to the conclusion. I find it very interesting, in reading others' comments, that the main frustrations seem to be in trying to create a "back-story" that fits with the commentator's personal world-view. That having been said, in talking to several friends who are counselors, there seems to be a trend in the 25-45 year-old population of an extended adolescence (including starter marriages, late first marriage, often multiple careers in short periods of time before settling into the "true" career, etc.), lasting as long as to age 35, which can account for the less-than-adult behaviours which are exhibited in this story by many of the characters. Waiting (somewhat impatiently) for the next installment!

It is not so much our own personal world-view as it is frustration with the Celt's weak male characters. I do not expect a big macho man, but at least a little bit of backbone when confronted by what the ex-wife said she was going to do with her bastard child. Maybe he could not of stopped her from naming the child after him, but he could of at least said something, instead of just walking away. It is the small nuances in a story that can make a character just too weak to even what to cheer for.

To Anonymous in USA

It is not so much our own personal world-view as it is frustration with the Celt's weak male characters.

I do not expect a big macho man. I do not even expect the characters to react even slightly like I would. But Alex should have at least shown a little bit of backbone when confronted by what the ex-wife said she was going to do with her bastard child. Maybe he could not have stopped her from naming the child after him, but he could have at least said something, instead of just walking away.

Even the weakest people that I have known will occasionally stand-up for themselves and say at least something.

It is the small nuances in a story that can make a character just too weak to even want to cheer for.

As usual

thecelt,

Apart from people trying to write your stories for you, I hope you realize that many people enjoy the stories you write and effort it takes to write them.

I don't know where this story is going, but I look forward to seeing what you do with it. And don't ever shy away from using whatever "poetic" license you need to get your story across.

You are one of the best here.

My Take

Sure, the poor husband is kind of a sap, and the women he ends up with are whorish or just plain whores. But don't you see where this could lead (obviously not with the Celt's story) but this crappy treatment by whores is the kind of thing that can lead to a modern "Jack the Ripper", I know, I'm always looking on the bright side! Get 'ya a Kabar and carve up the cheating cunts ;-)

re: She has taken away his right to name any child

a couple of people commented that the first wife took away his right to name his child after him. How? They aren't related at all.

And even if they are related: George Foreman has 5 sons name George!

I'm just now reading part one.

Different turn from the normal story. I have to admit, when I first read about Jennie, I thought you'd have them still involved by the end of the story somehow, even remotely. I was sure it was coming when you had her and the father talking at his grandmothers funeral. But you let him move on. I understood that part

Then you had him move on to Nicole. The part that I have to agree with, was what Harry said, it seemed to take him a long time to come to the conclusion that she was a call girl. Most folks his age (over 21) would have started to wonder why a lot faster than some of the folks under 21 might have. Not saying they can't or won't, just that when your ready to settle down, your alot more curious why the other person doesn't want to, but are giving you the signals that they do. But I thought his reasoning seemed to be sound and made sense.

And I kinda like GenghisKhan's comment. Why doesn't the husband say "Hey look what I did with another woman for you"? when the wife starts saying how she cheated for the husband's/boyfriends benifit. That was a classic take.

I liked how you got this story off to a good start

-Risq

Rick

When i first started reading about Nichole that rick his friend had hired her as a gift to his friend but i was wrong.
Atlanta,ga

I just found this story.

This is a good story. One little nit to pick, however. Quote: "I opened my eyes and looked down to see a blond head bobbing up and down and knew I had died and gone to heaven." But in at least two other places in the story, we are told that Nichole is brunette. Did she dye her hair without the readers' knowledge? Please write some more.

the exwife is an idiot and should not pass genes.

a one night bareback stand could have given her as easily as a bastard, not knowing the sperm donors medical history and insisting the child think he is the father again places the child at medical risk. he was right to rid himself of her!

It is the likely case

In my experience and observation, 4 of 5 women think nothing of betraying a man. It gets them wet to pull it off. Instead of taking the long shot to find one who doesn't feel that way, use the odds and have fun!!

WHY

Why did Nichole have blond hair when she was bobbing on Alex's cock?

HIIDE AND SEEK

can be a dangerous game for lovers. TK U MLJ LV NV

Wow....she forgot to say

BTW I'm a fucking hooker, wow Thecelt you know how to hurt a man

The perfect Skank Storm

A man with his junk inplace. BRAVO!!

#2 AN AUTO-BIO, SELF PORTRAIT

of a person who looks to be a loser with chicks, TK U MLJ LV NV

This One Is A Little Bit Different

While her "profession" is obviously a little out there, they were never exclusive, so she wasn't exactly cheating on him, even if she wasn't exactly honest with him.

Loved it

Very enjoyable. Five stars.

One more comment ...

She was repulsed by the idea of artificial insemination, but not by fucking a stranger? Very weird plot device.

already broken

Jennie held Alex in contempt, as was shown in her attitude toward him before he told her he was divorcing her.
The marriage was not going to last due to that as much as the cheating.
She may have done it unconsciously, feeling he was less to her because he could not impregnate her, but once it started the marriage was over.
Even if Alex could have accepted the child the contempt would have destroyed the marriage.

This man is jinxed.

I still think that he might end up with Jennie and help raise the boy that bears his name. And I promise that I have not read the next chapter, if I did it was a long time and and I do not remember. I don't care, it is just a story but that is how I would write it.

Millions in the bank

And he couldn't spend a few grand and set her free? What a worthless piece of shit.

Aside from that, well written and enjoyable

Chilley

Thoughts

As someone else said, if she wanted a baby so desperately, why NOT consent to in vitro? That way the baby would be both of theirs!

Maybe, MAYBE if she ASKED, he might have consented to artificial insemination using a sperm donor, but to CHEAT on him, to DELIBERATELY get pregnant with another man’s child, then plan to deceive him that it’s HIS baby, there is no hope for them.

She has NO right to tell the child that he is the father! Just because he has given up any parental rights doesn’t mean he has no say in how his name is used!

Supposedly Nichole has 3 roommates, but only HER name is on the mailbox?

@chilleywilley, why should he “set her free”? MAYBE if she came to him at the beginning explaining her situation ne MAY have taken pity on her and paid off her debt, even if he chose not to get involved with her, but not after she LIED to him!

Further Thoughts

First, I can only re-stress my earlier remarks

Second, I question her "debt" Just how honest has Ramon been with the accounting? Supposedly she could pay it off in a year, but now it's been TWO years and she still owes a "lot" of money? Does she have a signed note with Ramon, with a specified interest rate? Does she get any sort of statement showing how much she earned for Ramon, with how much going to her and how much going to pay down the loan It sort of stinks!

classless

Obviously, it wasn't just about a baby. Her claim that Artificial Insemination or in vitro were not options, proved it. She'd rather fuck a complete stranger in the back seat of a car, and lie to her husband about his paternity. Her actions make her a lower life than Nichole.....in my opinion. His search continues.