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by champagne198212/28/07

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This is a good poem I think could be made better if you dropped the first strophe completely. (Others more schooled may think differently, but this is just my opinion.)

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by Angeline12/28/07

Well I like the first strophe

so go figure. :D

Another lovely poem from you although I liked your Walking in Alberta better. I wonder if I've read you before the past few weeks. Your writing seems familiar to me (and I really like it lol). Maybe we just have similar styles. :)

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by LeBroz12/29/07

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Such a very fine poem without becoming either crude or sappy; sets up great imagery. I only have a small problem with the last 3 words; probably a consequence of reading so many really bad poems where couples entwine, meld, merge, and become one. Hmmmm - we coalesce ? Only thought of that word thanks to your stellar imagery.

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