I'm not the only one who's giving up on this story. The first installment was promising, but from there it's been a rapid downward spiral. THIS segment wasn't entertaining, erotic, exciting... It seems like you decided to write a degrading, hateful, confusing, non-arousing, non-incest/taboo story that alienates all readers.
I'd suggest starting over. Read your first part again and then ask yourself, "What would make this an erotic, arousing incest/taboo story next?" You took a wrong turn at the end of Part I, and you just kept going.
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GOODBYE
Goodbye ,enough is enough?
You've lost your audience.
I'm not the only one who's giving up on this story. The first installment was promising, but from there it's been a rapid downward spiral. THIS segment wasn't entertaining, erotic, exciting... It seems like you decided to write a degrading, hateful, confusing, non-arousing, non-incest/taboo story that alienates all readers.
I'd suggest starting over. Read your first part again and then ask yourself, "What would make this an erotic, arousing incest/taboo story next?" You took a wrong turn at the end of Part I, and you just kept going.
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