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Poor Ol' Dave
Gets a gilt-edged invitation to screw his friend's wife and can't even get his dick hard enough to push it in. What a loser.
Good Story
Good story, looking forward to see more from you. Too bad Dave couldn't deliver the wood.
What a Start!
Your first effort is a definite hit so lets hear more. This was one hot piece of erotica.
Vicky is a great piece of ass and Dave did his oral part very competently even if he had trouble getting it up.
Should be a Ten
One really hot story that should rate a ten. Please get busy and give us more of this good stuff.
Care in word usage would help
Like the story, people and action. Was initially put off by use of casual slang. Too many Literotica authors use "gonna" and "wanna" to show a casual style of talking. Going to and want to are perfectly good terms. Thanks for using contractions. Drives me mad to read some British writers and their inability to contract terms as would be said in ordinary speech. A fun story to read. Write more please. Nice to see your photo in the biography.
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