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Nice
A nice story, but I think you went too fast. There was no build up and everything happened quickly. I think it would have been better if you had just made this longer and described things in detail more.
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A good story. Great discriptions. Nice word pictures. But, a little quick on the trigger.haha I'd like to see at least two, maybe three pages per chapter. Giving me enough time to stroke my own cock to your vivid words and shoot my own load of cum. Does your husband read your stories? Do you play them out together? Or do you two swing and you are only recounting experiences? Write more, you are very good at it. Thank you. Richard
Longer, slower
I agree. I should be longer. While the surprise and the quick fuck was OK, it left questions: WAS he the online friend? Maybe that would be a good twist, if she told him she was daydreaming of him, then he admitted it WAS him. Then they could get to know each other and do it again more caringly? Not bad though. Just too quick.
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