Regarding the last comments...he also said that they were little girl tits and she said that they were artificial, so obviously they were deflating! C'mon! ;-) Great series! Just wondering if both girls were on the pill or if Jack is going to be in two delivery rooms in eight or nine months. He never seems to use a condom. ;-) Keep writing; you're doing a great job!
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Anonymous04/01/10
the vocabulary
What the fuck? Did you have a sex thesaurus beside you as you wrote?? How many synonyms for vagina could you possibly create?
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Anonymous01/30/11
The vocabulary
Dude I agree with the other guy but the amount of synonyms you used is amazing!!!
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Anonymous06/24/13
not good
why do writers start a story with incest then end it without incest? it ruins the flow of the story and puts it in a different catagory. if you want to write incest stories it should start and end with incest other wise put it in a different catagory.
English
I'm confused
First, u say her tits felt like basketballs, then, about 3 sentences later, u say her tits felt like softballs. Whih is it?
I'm confused
First, u say her tits felt like basketballs, then, about 3 sentences later, u say her tits felt like softballs. Which is it?
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Regarding the last comments...he also said that they were little girl tits and she said that they were artificial, so obviously they were deflating! C'mon! ;-) Great series! Just wondering if both girls were on the pill or if Jack is going to be in two delivery rooms in eight or nine months. He never seems to use a condom. ;-) Keep writing; you're doing a great job!
the vocabulary
What the fuck? Did you have a sex thesaurus beside you as you wrote?? How many synonyms for vagina could you possibly create?
The vocabulary
Dude I agree with the other guy but the amount of synonyms you used is amazing!!!
not good
why do writers start a story with incest then end it without incest? it ruins the flow of the story and puts it in a different catagory. if you want to write incest stories it should start and end with incest other wise put it in a different catagory.
Disagree....Thought it was a good series
Good series...How about some follow-up when Veronica returns
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