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by Anonymous01/23/08

Needs editing

I actually didn't get past the first paragraph after there were 3 grammatical errors. Proof-read, or have someone do it for you!

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by Anonymous01/24/08

Bad grammar

I agree with the other comment. "There" was frequently used when it should have been "their" and it was totally distracting. And there was no real buildup, so it seemed rushed and unrealistic. There was a germ for a story there, but it got lost.

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by Anonymous02/04/09

goood!!

omg good! altho try to keep it girl on girl. this is the lesbian section. :D

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