A Good Brother

WELL

honestly...I don't know.

Hell...

Of a good little tale. I liked it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Definitely a keeper. Write more!

The premise of her brother saving her from two rapists and him shooting them (and consequently earning her devotion) is plausible. I loved the fact you used a redhead covered in freckles. You made her pain and apprehension real and her consequently loving him as well. Your only failing was that while you did a fairly good job at describing her orgasm, what about his? How many times did he spurt? Did he feel the sensation building in his lower back? Did his toes want to curl up some beforehand? How about his face? Did he look into her eyes and give her this lusty/satisfied look of release/pleasure while spurting? Be more specific with that and you'll do that better than the average writer does here (they tend to build up everything else then the orgasm just largely 'happens').

that's actually kind of cute

Short and cute .... I like the brother ....

Sweet, Logical, Good Story

I liked your presentation. Very concise to the point and sweet. Good story. It is fiction but the way it is presented with the rational comments behind every action. It appears real. Keep up the good work.

The excessive violence at the start kinda killed the mood for the rest of the story.

And a good shot too,

So the sister got stripped and tied up in her own house by two guys? Plausible enough, but it sits wrong. Castration by gunshot? Won't EVEN go there...

Cute story.

no, Jerry is a hero

He did duty as a brother, and saved his beloved baby sister from the two filthy rapists. Emily loves her big brother as much as he loves her, and she shows her endless love by spreading her legs and welcoming his big hard cock up her sweet little cunt. She wants Jerry's babies, she wants to be his wife. Well, Jerry does what a husband does to his wife, he sticks his cock up her warm wet cunt, fucks her real good, and unloads his brotherly balls up his little sis, shooting her a huge twatful of his creamy semen. He'll be doing that a lot from now on, and he'll be giving his sweet sis all the babies she wants.

Seconds

Cool!

Rapist deserve that!

I liked it, but wow was it way short and a bit rushed. I was perfectly happy with the two guys getting shot, but hell this IS Texas, should have just aimed for the chest and saved the state a lifetime of money being spent to keep the trash behind bars. ...of course we all know you're supposed to aim for the center of mass, but this makes for an entertaining story, at least now we know, with no gear, they'll be somebody's prison bitches fir the rest of their lives :)

I did expect a 'whoah, whoah there girlie, Im nowhere near ready to be a daddy and have a squealing poop making machine waking me up five times a night! Maybe in a few years after I've ridden the tractor long enough that my hearing is going and I need hearing aids, then we can talk!' ;)

Weird stuff about rape trauma and her vulnerability makes this creepy

Her brother is as much of a mashed cock as he gave them rapists.