Tender and sweet, reminiscent of adolescent love. The shyness, the awkwardness, the sense of being on the precipice of discovery. . . you captured it well!
What a nice little story, capturing the nervousness and insecurity of youth but with a nice little twist. You should be proud of this effort and I'm sure it will do well in the contest for you.
You should write a part two to this story as an introduction for Cynthia's story. It was a beautifully romantic story that captured, perfectly, the ups and downs of young love.
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Lovely valentine tale
Well composed and a beautifully gentle tale.
Great!
What a sweet compact tale for Valentines. This is a very good story. Thank you for writing it T.
Sweet!
So short and yet a lovely little trap! Well done!
Well done, that man!
Sometimes the youngsters really need a little help!
Hidden Depths
Tender and sweet, reminiscent of adolescent love. The shyness, the awkwardness, the sense of being on the precipice of discovery. . . you captured it well!
Very sweet!
Well done, Tarakin. I'm impressed. Best of luck in the contest.
Short and sweet
Very nice!
Well Done
Good job my friend. Hope you do very well. It was a lovely sweet tale.
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Best of luck my friend
A great little story
What a nice little story, capturing the nervousness and insecurity of youth but with a nice little twist. You should be proud of this effort and I'm sure it will do well in the contest for you.
Sunday morning was never like this for me...
But then, I didn't have you writing it for me. Lovely story, T. Can't wait for more.
Awww... :)
It's over? Couldn't you do just a couple more paragraphs? :) It was really cute and sweet Tarakin! I wanted more.
Beautiful story
You should write a part two to this story as an introduction for Cynthia's story. It was a beautifully romantic story that captured, perfectly, the ups and downs of young love.
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