All Comments on 'Beyond'

by sweet GA peaches

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WickedEveWickedEveabout 16 years ago
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Nice poem. The "dreaming trees" stanza is quite good. I do wonder about your use of "phantom." Did you mean to use fathom?

LeBrozLeBrozabout 16 years ago
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Can feel the love in the richness of your vivid descriptions. And I think Eve's right that you probably meant fathom. Also, a bit more than halfway down where you say, "And like I child;" I think you meant to say, "And like a child." Picky, picky... Good to have you back posting again.

AngelineAngelineabout 16 years ago
This is a lovely piece of writing

The images are great, especially the strophes about the river and ocean and those feathery branches. I agree with the others though that you probably meant "fathom" not "phantom," and I also caught that typo that LeBroz mentioned. That sort of stuff is very easy to fix though and then you're left with all those lovely, dreamy images.

Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read. :)

bluerainsbluerainsabout 16 years ago
tides of life

contain the beauty of your flow....blue

Bill DadaBill Dadaabout 16 years ago
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Very nice, some beautiful images in this poem.

DuPainDuPainabout 16 years ago
Gentle

Your spirit intensely gentle captivates my mind!

tazz317tazz317almost 12 years ago
BE WARY OF BESTOWING

that which may not be returned, TK U MLJ LV NV

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