All Comments on 'All Dressed Up and Ready To Go'

by HornyPup

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
A bit rushed

This was a quickie story (no pun intended). There was no plot develpment, I mean come on finding a box after coming in the door is hardly developing a plot. Why did the woman want to dominate? Why did the man want to submit? That leads to character development of which there was none. I recommend starting over from scratch. You can do better if you put some time into developing your story and the characters.

WhoKnows225WhoKnows225about 10 years ago
Amazing

When I found Jen's Bitch, another story you did, it was like gold. Still in my top 5 stories, I have reread it at least 15 times and stupid me just realizing that there is an author just decided to see what else you wrote and I am glad I did. I love your stories even though I personally am not gay or into men so not those but the agressive and dominant females and shemale stories are the bomb and you should write more! I think a guy should be taken hard by a shemale / females in heels and nail polish and be made to wear a garter belt and lingerie bra and maybe a G-string. Appreciate the writing please continue!

WhoKnows225WhoKnows225about 10 years ago
Oh and also

Forgot to include this but just as suggestions if you ever get bored or something. I think the dominate girl / shemale should cum while fucking the guy while not caring if he does. I have really really been looking for a story along the lines of the girl fucks the guy for a while then stops and gives him a blowjob or plays with his dick and brings him to the edge, but at the last minutes stops and either doesnt let him cum or gives a ruined orgasm, and then starts fucking him again! that would be so hot! just an idea :) you should consider it

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