All Comments on 'It Just Happened Ch. 07'

Some chapters serve to be informative, so I understand. The only suggestion I have is that you pay more attention to detail. Say, when he kissed her tell the reader what he was thinking, or what she was thinking and describe the way their bodies felt when kissing, since this is an erotic coupling story, it is what the reader expects. Keep on truckin'!

Ignore the naysayers and continue with the way you feel the story should be written. It's your creation. No one has to like it but it is you who are sharing something with the reader.

The first thing I do every morning is read your latest submission. I was kind of sad to hear there will be only five more chapters. I am in no hurry for it to end. Anticipation is half the pleasure. Thank you.

Keep writing. This is getting interesting.

wow, that was.......'interesting'. boring, but interesting. ok, very mildly interesting. zzzzzzz...

After the first chapter you have me hooked. A well-defined group of characters, a narrator with conflicting emotions - and revenge in his heart, and a nice set up sprinkled with humour. You’re definitely playing with our expectations (and I love it!); this could go so many ways. Bugger the comments by nay-sayers – you can’t rush a good story. Keep up the good work. Cheers, AngeloM