by UnderYourSpell
with a side order of plums, right? :-)
I'm not wild about ellipsis marks in poems and I think this topic is a tough one to do without cliche, so metaphor is a good way to go.
Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review Thread on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum. Thanks for the read!
Bananas and plums — okay, you have your fruit and with my different taste, I'll have mine. Am with Angeline on those ellipses; would have been better after the first swallow if you'd skipped a line and then put the second swallow alone on its own line.
for a banana ? uh-huh.. what an enticing little
number, quick wit and full of luscious flavor to
savor !! ...... I think I need a banana ! *winks*
sGp