Despite what the others are saying, I thought this was a very enjoyable story, one that grabbed me from the start to the end. The only thing that will put me off is bad spelling, to my knowledge it was perfect. As was this story. Well written in my opinion.
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Anonymous02/24/08
Enjoyable Story
Funny thing about this kind of story...it can very easily happen. I have a friend that almost did marry his sister, but the blood tests showed they were siblings. Great story.
Your story is great, and I put notice to the other readers, "Who cares about the grammer, or typos" you read the story and you either like it or not. If you want to be picky stand in the corner like all the other dim-watts and pick your nose. Like I said bud great story very believable. Don't worry about the sister-brother thing, looks like it's not their fault, let the live and let live as the saying goes. Love always finds a way.
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Anonymous02/24/08
Realistic and erotic
Author, forget those that pick at grammer. None of us in real life speak in full grammatically correct sentences. Just put "" around those. I loved the story. Keep writing.
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Anonymous02/25/08
very believable
a very believable story. Thks for this wonderful submission.
First of all, let me say that I thoroughly enjoyed this story! It is very believable and I could see how that could realistically happen to a lot of folks. But the sex part was great too. ANd, if I were in their shoes, I'd do the same thing. Fuck the world. I love who I love!!
Now, isn't it strange that all the folks who are so critical of someone else's writing, never leave their names? I wonder if any of them can write a story. And if they do, is it as correct as they think our's should be?
Screw all the critics who never leave their names!!
What this story is ..It is very sweet and endearing,opening a brand new aspect to incest..What it wasnt was Hot Steamy gunna fuck my sis oh shit sex...But thats OK too..We need other ways to think about Love than just Sweaty Fuckin...But aint nothin wrong with either,and rare to have both which I am saying Strive for,,,,,
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Anonymous01/27/09
bravo
wow bravo very good really enjoyed it would love to read a part two to this one so eexaul loved how the two of you took your time with each other not the bang bang fucked the shit out of my sister kind of story keep up the good work.
Wow! Romance, lust, and lots of great sex! Too bad about the unfortunate discovery of the underlying relationship. But, the good thing was that neither of you allowed it to interfere with the great sex.
1 sub divisions (subdivisions)
2. sought it's target (its)
3. sub-divisions (subdivisions )
4. red head (redhead)
5, When it became time to officially change my name to (????) I also reversed (INCOMPLETE THOUGHT)
6. Golf (golf)
7. One mid afternoon I happened to be in the cafeteria about three in the afternoon (REDUNDANT)
8. mid-night (midnight)
9. awaking of deeper feelings (awakening)
10, mid January (mid-January)
11. rain storm (rainstorm)
12. fire place (fireplace)
13. heavy towel robe (terrycloth)
14. Brandy (brandy)
15. each other company (other’s)
16. it's harsh message (its)
17. long lost (long-lost)
18. joined her's (hers)
19. mid spring (mid-spring)
20. ocean front (oceanfront)
21. mid-week (midweek)
22. We were siblings and we were married (NO THEY WERE NOT YET MARRIED!!!!)
23. Guess what brother/lover/husband (THEY AREN'T HUSBAND AND WIFE, YET )
24. meaningless panties (MEANINGLESS IMAGE)
25. glorious SENSATION encompassing my rock hard cock. I opened my eyes to see Rita's head moving up and down as the SENSATIONS also moved up and down.So far, for some reason, we had not indulged each other orally. So this was a brand new SENSATION I let myself wake up and simply enjoy the SENSATIONS . . . . I (knew) the SENSATIONS (SENSATIONAL WRITING 5X !!!!)
26. half dry (half-dry)
27. take out menu (takeout)
28. frig (fridge)
29. body surfed (body-surfed)
30. river front (riverfront)
31. all together (altogether)
32. drinking wine cooler (coolers)
33. Like teenager making out (teenagers
Good story, but short.
Is not the first time that happens, bro/sis are fall in love and married, and then discover they are siblings.
Of course, I can´t say nothing about the grammatical errors, because English is not my native language and I´m not a editor.
Good Job.
English
Lovely Story
Despite what the others are saying, I thought this was a very enjoyable story, one that grabbed me from the start to the end. The only thing that will put me off is bad spelling, to my knowledge it was perfect. As was this story. Well written in my opinion.
Enjoyable Story
Funny thing about this kind of story...it can very easily happen. I have a friend that almost did marry his sister, but the blood tests showed they were siblings. Great story.
Great Story
Your story is great, and I put notice to the other readers, "Who cares about the grammer, or typos" you read the story and you either like it or not. If you want to be picky stand in the corner like all the other dim-watts and pick your nose. Like I said bud great story very believable. Don't worry about the sister-brother thing, looks like it's not their fault, let the live and let live as the saying goes. Love always finds a way.
Realistic and erotic
Author, forget those that pick at grammer. None of us in real life speak in full grammatically correct sentences. Just put "" around those. I loved the story. Keep writing.
very believable
a very believable story. Thks for this wonderful submission.
regards.
Isn't it strange?
First of all, let me say that I thoroughly enjoyed this story! It is very believable and I could see how that could realistically happen to a lot of folks. But the sex part was great too. ANd, if I were in their shoes, I'd do the same thing. Fuck the world. I love who I love!!
Now, isn't it strange that all the folks who are so critical of someone else's writing, never leave their names? I wonder if any of them can write a story. And if they do, is it as correct as they think our's should be?
Screw all the critics who never leave their names!!
A Great Tale!
I loved it, Donna. I just think you are one of the best! Keep writing good incest tales.
Perfect
Nuff said.
is but wasnt
What this story is ..It is very sweet and endearing,opening a brand new aspect to incest..What it wasnt was Hot Steamy gunna fuck my sis oh shit sex...But thats OK too..We need other ways to think about Love than just Sweaty Fuckin...But aint nothin wrong with either,and rare to have both which I am saying Strive for,,,,,
bravo
wow bravo very good really enjoyed it would love to read a part two to this one so eexaul loved how the two of you took your time with each other not the bang bang fucked the shit out of my sister kind of story keep up the good work.
HOT STORY
Wow! Romance, lust, and lots of great sex! Too bad about the unfortunate discovery of the underlying relationship. But, the good thing was that neither of you allowed it to interfere with the great sex.
I love the story.
A lovely story
It goes to show. You can find the love of your life in the most unexpected ways. True love knows no bounds.
Correct decision, of course.
They would be fools to give up what they had. Thank you for writing this nice story.
Just delish !
As always a restrained and sensual story with quality to the fore.
they should be happy together
they found each other and fell in love.
just wish their surprise discovery had not been taken away from us by the title.
FIRE YOUR EDITOR OR GET ONE!!!!
1 sub divisions (subdivisions)
2. sought it's target (its)
3. sub-divisions (subdivisions )
4. red head (redhead)
5, When it became time to officially change my name to (????) I also reversed (INCOMPLETE THOUGHT)
6. Golf (golf)
7. One mid afternoon I happened to be in the cafeteria about three in the afternoon (REDUNDANT)
8. mid-night (midnight)
9. awaking of deeper feelings (awakening)
10, mid January (mid-January)
11. rain storm (rainstorm)
12. fire place (fireplace)
13. heavy towel robe (terrycloth)
14. Brandy (brandy)
15. each other company (other’s)
16. it's harsh message (its)
17. long lost (long-lost)
18. joined her's (hers)
19. mid spring (mid-spring)
20. ocean front (oceanfront)
21. mid-week (midweek)
22. We were siblings and we were married (NO THEY WERE NOT YET MARRIED!!!!)
23. Guess what brother/lover/husband (THEY AREN'T HUSBAND AND WIFE, YET )
24. meaningless panties (MEANINGLESS IMAGE)
25. glorious SENSATION encompassing my rock hard cock. I opened my eyes to see Rita's head moving up and down as the SENSATIONS also moved up and down.So far, for some reason, we had not indulged each other orally. So this was a brand new SENSATION I let myself wake up and simply enjoy the SENSATIONS . . . . I (knew) the SENSATIONS (SENSATIONAL WRITING 5X !!!!)
26. half dry (half-dry)
27. take out menu (takeout)
28. frig (fridge)
29. body surfed (body-surfed)
30. river front (riverfront)
31. all together (altogether)
32. drinking wine cooler (coolers)
33. Like teenager making out (teenagers
Enjoyable
In spite of the attack by the grammar police pointing out errors, I found this to be a nice story.
Good story
Good story, but short.
Is not the first time that happens, bro/sis are fall in love and married, and then discover they are siblings.
Of course, I can´t say nothing about the grammatical errors, because English is not my native language and I´m not a editor.
Good Job.
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