All Comments on 'Threesome with GF & Asian Co-worker'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Got names?

not a bad story, but would be easier to enjoy if you use a name instead of a letter, doesn't have to be a real name, but nevertheless, names would greatly imporove the flow of the story.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Names

Give them names. A letter for the name is just too clinical and cold.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
wow

hey is this girl name mai...lol..its just so hot...

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Really, really bad grammar

The grammar is extremely poor and detracts from the story. By the time I reached the fourth paragraph, I couldn't go on. In this case, the medium (written English) really IS the message.

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