by jjones4483
not a bad story, but would be easier to enjoy if you use a name instead of a letter, doesn't have to be a real name, but nevertheless, names would greatly imporove the flow of the story.
Give them names. A letter for the name is just too clinical and cold.
The grammar is extremely poor and detracts from the story. By the time I reached the fourth paragraph, I couldn't go on. In this case, the medium (written English) really IS the message.