by PiscesLover
You did a very well for a first time writer. I really enjoyed the story, but I would like to see you expand this story because it was a bit short.
This was an execelent story until I got to the 11 inch cock. Then I quit. Sorry.
A few small grammatical errors "She grinded" should be "She ground" and a few others which were in conversations so I wrote them off as just idiomatic, but I'm not certain. Anyway, a very good first effort.