nice story yeah..but could've been better,i'm not a writer but there could've been a nice back story to why she wanted her dad and why her mom left,mom could've been mentioned more too and perhaps what her mom looked like more in detail....well...over all this was a good story. Keep writing just make sure...u fill the necessary info next time! :D
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Anonymous03/12/08
A
Nicely written even if things happened a bit quickly. More like man rape.haha If Candyfloss is a female writer, I like the perspective of a woman. Seems the writer might have been thinking about this for a while and was masturbating while writing, a quick, hard cum? If a fantasy extension of a childhood incident, maybe saw daddy fucking mommy or his cock while he masturbated, I would like to know the back story. My only complaint, while I got hard and began stroking, the story ended. The next chapter should be maybe twice as long so I can jack off and shoot my own load. Again, nicely written and stimulating. Hope to learn more about you and hear more of your adventures. Richard
English
keep writing but check it afterwards...
nice story yeah..but could've been better,i'm not a writer but there could've been a nice back story to why she wanted her dad and why her mom left,mom could've been mentioned more too and perhaps what her mom looked like more in detail....well...over all this was a good story. Keep writing just make sure...u fill the necessary info next time! :D
A
Nicely written even if things happened a bit quickly. More like man rape.haha If Candyfloss is a female writer, I like the perspective of a woman. Seems the writer might have been thinking about this for a while and was masturbating while writing, a quick, hard cum? If a fantasy extension of a childhood incident, maybe saw daddy fucking mommy or his cock while he masturbated, I would like to know the back story. My only complaint, while I got hard and began stroking, the story ended. The next chapter should be maybe twice as long so I can jack off and shoot my own load. Again, nicely written and stimulating. Hope to learn more about you and hear more of your adventures. Richard
Very Good
Please write again. This was very good.
Best always,
Rick
Boo!
Hiss!
Continue!
That's a great story you got here but you have to keep on forward!!!!
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