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by KOLKORE02/28/08

Holding him by your breath

I had to struggle with some of the images, but the ending made it for me: "I breath your world in/and breath out life".

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by jthserra02/29/08

Well done

but I think you might be missing the e in a couple of your breaths... breathe in, breathe out

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by lorencino02/29/08

So overwhelmed

Yes! So overwhelmed by the imagery that I didn't even notice the spelling mistake. It's an easy one to make or miss that it should probably be include in Strunk's Elements of Style if that were ever to be revised.

The poem, however remains magnificent. That image of the heart moving aside to make room for the magic of communion is glorious.

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