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However, I think you need to work out a few things: for example, it would be nice if you gave us more information on the type of society your characters live in socially, theologically, economically, politically, etc. Which brings me to another point: Alison yells "Jesus Christ;" however, this would be an "Earth" coloquialism. You might want to come up with your own sayings for this particular story, unless it takes place on some alternative Earth. Otherwise, this is a really great piece, and I can't wait to read more!