Still good, all the way through. there are logic holes you could drive a bus through, but what the hell, this is a Romance.
And my oh My it was Short !!!
Characters, filled out now, are likeable, too likeable perhaps. Where's the " villain of the piece" bound to turn up soon, i hope.
Cheers
Kilroy
English
Yep 75 ( it's a long way to the top)
Still good, all the way through. there are logic holes you could drive a bus through, but what the hell, this is a Romance.
And my oh My it was Short !!!
Characters, filled out now, are likeable, too likeable perhaps. Where's the " villain of the piece" bound to turn up soon, i hope.
Cheers
Kilroy
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