This story was good, but a bit fast. I like the imagery, however, about 1/3 of the way through the story, you switch from refering to "the woman" to refering to "you" and that's very distracting also. Good effort though!
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Good, but a bit fast....
This story was good, but a bit fast. I like the imagery, however, about 1/3 of the way through the story, you switch from refering to "the woman" to refering to "you" and that's very distracting also.
Good effort though!
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