Quite a contrast you've painted here, between the young and the old.
of flowers for women--bright and reaching for the Sun in youth and drooping and huddled in age. I'm not normally a fan of the sort of simple rhyme scheme you're using here, but you've done it with such a light touch that the poem doesn't seem childish or sing-songy. It feels just right, and I've really enjoyed reading it. Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.
It was probably the sun worshipping that played havoc with the older ladies skin!
do not seem to me more older looking than during the day, but the whole image in the poem was intriguing. For the older women I would have tried the same sunflowers after they produce the seeds... their look than fits perfectly to the image I believe you were trying to portray (and parallel in the way of nature of course).
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