Very detailed, love the concept. Please continue.....
great storyline but the chapter was tooooo short...
The first two-thirds were written in the past tense, then you switched to the present tense only to jump back to the past in the very end.
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Very detailed, love the concept. Please continue.....
Great story but toooo short
great storyline but the chapter was tooooo short...
Past? Present? When? Distracting
The first two-thirds were written in the past tense, then you switched to the present tense only to jump back to the past in the very end.
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